Chlorine Voices

My dreams once vibrant as kaleidoscopic views

thought I knew my way to heaven's gate

chlorine  chimera saturated the devils eyes

bleached the color from my hallucinations

Laid to die in a field, burnt umbrage's past history

shadowed doubts annihilated black & white 

rainbows splintered   under  pressured allusions

trapped in mottled spectrum tween gray voices

Author's Note

Reviews

[annie lee]

This is too sad, Frieda. Your description of broken dreams and the color bleached from the world exactly fits the agony of a broken dream, and not necessarily a romantic one. I took a promotion once because I thought it was a good move for my managerial track, but once I was there, I hated it. And I felt as if some giant hand was squeezing my heart; the sunlight lost brightness, and the music ground to a halt. Well-written.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts here annie lee....

[Dye]

I know it's over my head when my first impulse is to grab a dictionary and thesaurus. But I feel more educated now. :) I read it as a mix of a once happy place shattered by harsh realities. Dunno? ha ha

[Frieda P]

Oh I don't mind when that happens, I love new words, you got it Dye! Reality can be a cruel place, sometimes I liked living on DeNial better.

[Dye]

DeNail is a beautiful place...sometimes over populated though. :)

[Dye]

*DeNial*---ugh- back to the dictionary for me.

[Frieda P]

That's why I moved out, but I always seem to revisit it seems. :-)

[Justaguy]

DeNail...LMAO!!!!

[Frieda P]

What did I miss here??

[Justaguy]

lol. Dye's spelling...lol

[Vani Jalagar]

splendid writing ....I enjoyed :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Vani :-)

[MikeV]

I can relate to this all too well!
Beautiful write :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mike, I figured I'm not the only one. :-)

[Justaguy]

We all need recharging once in a while to keep our dreams colorful. great job.

[Frieda P]

My chargers at the shop, thanks Ron............

[Sami Khalil]

I really like the idea that vibrant dreams can be bleached by different reasons. Even in your hallucinations you are brilliant...Splendid as always...:)

[Frieda P]

You flatter me Sami, I can't pay you anymore than I already am hon ;-) I meant thanks muchly!

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you is enough. You are welcome muchly...:)

[SyberRose]

Autumn leaves are more beautiful and colorful as they are dying...hopefully it will be like that for us one day...in our eternal life...more beautiful then the present...Rose:)

[Frieda P]

So true Rose, I doubt they have nightmares though, ha, thanks! ;-)

[lee von cleef]

Purpose in life. what is great ? what is small ? where can a hand be applied to carry the weight ?
the fishing pole, a bated hook, am I pre ,or me ? who wrote my program ? well ,me I am confused. But Freida is a alive creative force , who can splinter rainbows across the page.

[Frieda P]

I have no clue who wrote your program lee, sometimes I don't get it but I love it, ha-ha thanks my sweet friend.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Holding fast to our dreams is possibly the most difficult thing we face as adults in a world filled with brutal realizations and explicit actualities. A dark, but very good piece! I relate to this deeply, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Travis, that & running out of chocolate. ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I hear that... I'm fortunate enough to be a perpetual chocolate factory. ;) lol

[Tom]

A strong, evocative poem describing a kind of all consuming darkness that has descended, shrouding out all things bright and positive! Indeed we all can/have felt like this but the sunlight will break through eventually, we just have to wait it out!

A demure one Frieda P, though still absorbing in theme, style and genre !

[Frieda P]

....waiting, waiting.....waiting. Thanks Tom :-)

[Tom]

The fog will clear Frieda, though when surrounded it's difficult to see when but it will !

[Lydia Shutter]

The images in this one are spectacular, Frieda. Responsibility and anxiety can drain the color from our lives, but rest assured it CAN return. Your dreams have not died....they have just decided to sleep a while. You have expressed so much in just two stanzas here. Powerful writing. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Well at least somebody's sleeping ha, thanks for your insightful review Lydi, always much appreciated.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, insomnia....the bane of so many of us. Sorry you are not sleeping!