'Stop Writing Everything Down'

'Stop Writing Everything Down'

A Poem by Frieda P
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~with a little help from my favorite Leonard Cohen

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'stop writing everything down'
bouncing round here in my unrhym'd head
i crossed a line in the ocean that doesn't exist
more than two kerfuffled sides of several coins  
things don't stay the same but they never change
i see things from both sides now and neither is winning
voices singing off key, what happened to jazz hands
leave it alone, just bask in the sun and dip into the shadows
lost in the script of love song lyrics that I wrote myself
my tongue is tone deaf and my ears can't taste a sound
i'll just suffer this fate, and write it all in hieroglyphics
then it won't matter what tone it's strung out around 
'stop writing everything down'..............................

© 2013 Frieda P


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DrD
I write everything down . . . . like "inhale, exhale" . . . . that sort of thing. Jotting things down help me to visualize things. Like with your name your eyebrows need to be connected over your nose. Things like that. Anyway, I liked the poem and jotted down some notes about it . . . . but there I go again. (inhale) Nice job and enjoyable.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

That could be a problem if you lose your notepad DrD, nice to see you again, thanks so much, enjoy y.. read more



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"more than two kerfuffled sides of several coins " There are several sides to EVERY circumstance in life and the more we examine them, the less sense they make. "dip into the shadows" well, that will show you in the worst light and, after all, it is better to look good than to feel good...isn't it? No, things don't really change, but our attitude does...and perhaps that is a good thing. Write everything down, Frieda....we enjoy reading it! Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Love this review Lydi....when does it start to make sense I wonder. I do write everything down, I .. read more
Knock on Wood so to speak. As always a well crafted poem with enough to intrigue. You ladies share panties?!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I love it when you grovel. ;-) lol!
John Alexander McFadyen

10 Years Ago

Yes but make NO mistake I would make YOU pay!
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Promises promises......... ;-P
the coin is spinning Frieda....I doubt it will ever LAND

Fantastic piece of woven artistry here that only YOU could create.
All this, and Leonard too
TOO MUCH

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I agree Dave, coins spinning out of control, and I'm sure you can rhyme that one too! Thanks muchl.. read more
Dr. Wood ?

10 Years Ago

my lap top's sealed
Haha This is really good Mrs.R. You're on quite a roll...you're definitely channelling Leonard here...awesome ;)

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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha sorry love, I just woke up ;P x
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

You bum, nice life Benji!! ;-P
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Actually it's not that nice a life Mrs.R ;P
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DrD
I write everything down . . . . like "inhale, exhale" . . . . that sort of thing. Jotting things down help me to visualize things. Like with your name your eyebrows need to be connected over your nose. Things like that. Anyway, I liked the poem and jotted down some notes about it . . . . but there I go again. (inhale) Nice job and enjoyable.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

That could be a problem if you lose your notepad DrD, nice to see you again, thanks so much, enjoy y.. read more
I don't even think Leonard Cohen influences can make you :stop writing everything down"..and if you did some day stop most of us her around these here cyber parts would be very sad around here...great piece


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks mojo, I do write everything down, if I don't have paper available, I've been known to write o.. read more
It's a dizzy merry go round isn't it?....everything begs to be written down...
How can you deny it when your ink flows... Lucky you!...some of us have writer's block.. Uh!
Dr.Wood surely keeps you thinking, doesn't he... wonderfully conveyed!~xoxo~

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I get writer's block too, I just write nonsense like this Robbie! ;-) xoxo

Blame the do.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

10 Years Ago

If this is your nonsense, then I'm in trouble! lol 'cause I usually have nothing...not one word. ;(.. read more
Since I'm not feeling so well tonight I'm kind of confuzzled by this! Ha... Is it about differing opinions?? Or are just yelling at me to stop writing everything down?? Hmm... ;-p

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Dye

10 Years Ago

Pfft! LOL I'm with Red on this one... commando!!!
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Hahah they must be Robbies then, I have to stop now.....nite! ;-)
Robbie~xoxo~

10 Years Ago

Nite ladies... came to get my panties back! ;P
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Dye
Nothing wrong to two sides in my opinion. Some things change and some things don't, I say write it all down. lol Truthfully I might have missed the point of this one, but that's what I'm sticking with.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

It started out about rhyming and free verse due to a conversation I had with doc wood, but the muse.. read more
Dye

10 Years Ago

LOL--- that makes more sense. Damn muse!
"leave it alone, just bask in the sun and dip into the shadows

lost in the script of love song lyrics that I wrote myself

my tongue is tone deaf and my ears can't taste a sound"

The two - sided coins , the two opposite realities , the two lines of change are all evident in your splendid divided philosophy on love that deserves an undivided attention...Bravo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Sami, jazzed you understood my lunacy. ;-)
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

I try...lol
Welcome muchly...:) A great poet and singer...:)

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