'Still'...

If the sun were to set in your eyes

as the moon settled over my soul 

falling to the depths of an ocean's mile

I'd 'still' remember how you made me feel

& everyday that ends in why I'll miss you

Reviews

[Jack...]

Five lines...that's all it took for you to touch my heart with this poem. We all miss people and it affects all of us in different ways...but when the missing is constant and how they made you feel is only found in memories, then the sadness is a pain we only wish we could miss. Frieda, you are an amazing poet and I am so thrilled I have the opportunity to read you and call you friend.

[Frieda P]

You've truly touched my heart, this one apparently wrote itself, I had a high temp and when I awoke, it was sitting in my notepad, obviously never far from my mind, thanks for your kind heart and being such a good friend always Jack...x

[OTownPete]

Succinct and full of love's message.

[Rebecca Buller]

I'm sorry, I'm mesmerized by the butterflies:) But on a more serious note, this was a very touching piece on missing someone we love and the memories we clutch close to our hearts. Beautiful, milady.

[Emerald Seas]

A lovely tribute to a missing loved one. A longing felt through tout each line. Nice penning, mr friend.

[Strider Marcus Jones]

Like the thought and how you convey it. 100/100

[Frieda P]

Thanks Strider, very much appreciated.

[Blue Ivory]

Oh god, Frieda! Flattery has a limit you know? xD You're so good at this!

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks Siren, you humble me my sweet friend!

[Blue Ivory]

You pshh you love it. Admit it. :3

[Michael G. Smith]

Beautiful serene atmosphere of missing someone.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mike, muchly appreciated.

[SyberRose]

You even write lovely poetry when you are sick with a fever...beautiful words Frieda as always...:)

[Frieda P]

Never far from my mind I guess Rose, thanks so much. ;-)

[Tom]

Very emotive and inspiring !

You have captivated a beautiful much missed friendship so eloquently Frieda !!

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Tom, thanks so much my friend.

[Tom]

And the fluttering butterflies are enchanting !

[Leslie Philibert]

Lot of birds moving here..nice write !

[Frieda P]

Thanks Leslie.

[Mark]

very powerful lines. moon setting... just beautiful. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark. :-)