'tween raindrops

'tween raindrops

A Poem by Frieda P

i yearn for you
   'tween raindrops
   silkiness
    of early morn's dew,
 spirit
    of twilight's mist
 dark cherry wine's
    intoxication
 & comforts 
    of a different rhyme
those spaces 
   that enchant musings
toxic perfum'd lacings
     air filled of metaphorical
blush'd smoke
    gasping for surrender
'tween honey'd breaths
         wafting in my mind 
  of nectar'd 
       burgundy enchantments


© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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Great work as always, Frieda - such beautiful use of language and imagery!! "dark cherry wine's intoxication & comforts of a different rhyme" evokes a multitude of emotions and thoughts.

Somehow, I initially read "different rhyme" as "different time" when I first read it - perhaps that's what I had expected you to say. The line "air filled of metaphorical/blush'd smoke" is amazing too - I pictured a reddish-pink puff of smoke bursting in the air.

And one thing that makes your poems distinctly yours (as you probably know) is the 'ds at the end of certain words. Without your name on it, I still might say, "Must be a Frieda poem!" Wonderful and enjoyable to read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Huge smiles here, you made my morning Eric, thanks so much for your glowing review!



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Today Frieda, your page is a breath of fresh air, I am enjoying reading

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Smiling, thanks so much Cassie, so happy you enjoyed this one, I rather like this one myself :-)
I feel like someone just wafted a silk scarf over my eyes as I read this. It is such a beautiful write ! You have written it in a perfect form that extols the romantic genre well and I love the presentation and font color too. "Dark cherry wine's intoxication" - a superb line. Loved this. Justine :)

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Oh I adore that silk scarf response Justine, thanks so much! :-)
Aww you don't have to long for me. :P

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

In your dreams hon lol, ha I meant thanks Mark!
Mark

10 Years Ago

uh huh you're welcome.
tween? ... ok please help me out here... whats this about? lol

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

haha N...just another word for 'between', you can figure the rest out for yourself hon! ;-)
My Lady it is 05:10 and you are still going strong with intoxicating verse that draws on rich and vibrant metaphors to bring feeling and colour and taste to the page. Oh and Jack is soooooo smooth I am calling him Jack Glass from here on in lol!

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ah my Lord, you humble me with your charm'd words, and laughing at Jack Glass..ha.
Beautiful. You definitely have amazing talent.

Kaze~

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Kaze, you're sweet for saying.
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

10 Years Ago

Your very welcome. :)
I don't know how to write an adequate response to the beauty of this. It has a delicate feel and yet is so ripe and fragrant. Well done, Frieda, so well done, indeed.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

That was beyond adequate Soliokiss, thanks so much indeed.
I felt my mind floating in the early morning fog as I read this. A semi-sweet snapshot in time that took me back to a day when I took pleasure in such moments. Beautifully written.

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks for the luverly review Damien.
Wonderful, as always and very sweet and beautiful!

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Gleb!
Cherry - honey - nectar - burgundy... This poem indulges my sweet tooth, Frieda.

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Good to know, thanks Rita.... don't forget to brush. ;-)

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