~Exhaled whisper'd whirlwinds

I drank in your desire, 

glimps'd in adoration's gaze

exhaled the whisper'd whirlwinds 

       of untamed memories past

    release in your heartfelt sanctuary,

        retreated on the horizons 

                  of transparent clouds

      nestl'd upon lofty sanctum's skies

 ecstasy 's moon collided onto lucent stars,

                 diaphanous sentiments of soft caresses

           feather'd embraces of Ero's empyrean bliss

    spirit soared on exquisite 

                  vaults of heaven's rapture

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack Wolfe]

Ecstasy('s) moon collided onto lucent stars, (did you mean lucent, it fits the stars perspective but better as luminescent) and then 'onto' seems a bit jarred, perhaps into.

I found this to be quite enthralling, though short, and the rhythm and omissions seemed right it was just the one line, I am in no way a poetic expert, so this just my opinion . . .

[Frieda P]

Lucent is shining and translucent, I preferred it, Tomato Tomahto ;) Thanks for your thoughtful review Jack...

[Ruth]

One could dissect your writing and find meaning within each line, every tone, each word used to the maximum...love the music too, beautiful xo

[Frieda P]

What a sweet thing to say, thanks muchly Poppy! xo

[s y e]

Wouldn't it be amazing if we all found that one perfect person who loved us for us and held us close, kept us from harms way and just plain loved us? Don't we all dream of that? Loving someone as much as they love you and knowing the love you more than anything is just a great feeling... One of course, I've yet to experience but a girl can dream! I adore this one and the music, it's all perfection really.

Ooooft and flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Yes it'd be heavenly noodlebumble, may you find it in your lifetime honey. xo

[DIVYA]

You crafted a beautiful dream here Frieda...Sheer bliss. A great read!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words Divya!

[Trace]

I may be wrong
But this sounds like one helluva great description
For an incredible orgasm.

That ....
Or....

Um..... never mind.

Enjoyed.
Trace.

[Frieda P]

Oh that brought a huge smile to my face, thanks Trace...

[Trace]

I always strive to make a woman smile.
It looks good on you.

Trace

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the poem, and the music, but not sure about them together. I know you are a fan of the auto play, but in this instance, I preferred to read it without the music. This is, of course, only an opinion, but the sound is melancholy and the poem doesn't strike me that way.

[Frieda P]

I'll take it, and I passed the editing too :) I can't help what I hear in my head when I'm writing, I thought it sounded kind of heavenly, sad really?

[Rita L. Sev]

Those untamed memories set the heart aflutter... A sensual treat in this poem, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rita.

[MsJewel]

Soft and sensual...written with the elegance that is you Frieda...
Stunning!

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Julie! :)

[Shirlena]

Seldom one experiences this kind of love and affection but don't you wish you felt that way, in the arms of another, floating on some one's love and even higher because you know they float on your love too and you both got each, having someone that has you. One of the ultimate highs in life and you make us feel it, you fabulous poetic woman, you :).

[Frieda P]

I thought I did at one time, you know how that story ends....it's gotta be in one of my rants ha....thanks so much Shirlenaa, I adore your reviews dahlin' :)

[Shirlena]

I have to tell it like it tis dahling so you deserved it :)

[Frieda P]

Don't make me give ya a sloppy kiss now ;)

[R. L. Hill]

The lust builds to ecstasy and then to a blinding aftermath of love in this poem. Very ethereal as though two souls are floating on waves of pleasure in the heavens. Very lovely, dear

[Frieda P]

Oh what a luverly thing to say, thanks Quirklet...

[Scott Metro]

Nice passion play..!!!
Enjoyed it.

Scotty

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Scotty, glad you enjoyed!! I almost didn't recognize you without a smart remark. ;)

[Scott Metro]

The day is young...lol
S........

[Frieda P]

Tis afternoon sleepyhead....

[Scott Metro]

Residual....