Creeping Determinism ~ Einstein Noodle & Frieda COLLABORATION

this tragedy was so avoidable

all the dots were there

connected to a creeping feeling

clear like mosquitoes stuck in amber;

determinism held like muddied arrogance

trying desperately to dance

Reflecting back, 

like camera shutter winks

rippling within the eye's wisdom

twinkling blinks of  past reality's snapshots

everything looks better

swayed waves of sight

like heat rising over ocean sand

so simple to see when turning pages 

looking back

frozen memories 

thawing in currents demands

  digging in the ash to remember

how the road led to indecision's rhyme

   when windows of reason shut the mind

       moments in life seem to trickle down

as the clock ticks ticks quarter to hindsight

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This is incredible feast of imagery...I was hooked at the connected dots, a fitting image in light of the poem's style...the major theme I take from this is media manipulation, and a search for the truth in visual propaganda...am I over-analyzing it with that interpretation? The clip suggests a less-serious piece than what I'm reading ;P But again, I can't stress enough how much I loved the imagery here...the windows of reason shutting the mind really got the wheels turning, possibly because I like window imagery, and a lot of my ideas come while looking out my window...congrats to both of you on a sterling work :)

[Frieda P]

Something along those lines, E read a book...we were trying to fill in a few chapters ;) I find windows enticing fodder for poetry too Dali, ain't that a coinkydink? Thanks for your glowing review sweet Benji, muchly appreciated! :) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha Okay good...I'm notorious for misinterpreting poems, except for yours ;) The list of coinkydinks is pretty long Mrs.R haha You're most welcome my sweet friend :) x

[Frieda P]

I love where you took it...it's mostly about hindsight, but that would fit too....in your brilliant Dali mind, it probably makes more sense ;) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Speechless now Mrs.R...I saw the hindsight element as well, among other things...I read it a few times so I collected a few ideas ;) xo

[Frieda P]

That's the best part about poetry, n'est-ce pas?

[kublakhan27]

No question ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

Kubla .. i love your take on this .. i wonder if this may help:
" creeping determinism, is the inclination, after an event has occurred, to see the event as having been predictable, despite there having been little or no objective basis for predicting it, prior to its occurrence.[1][2] It is a multifaceted phenomenon that can affect different stages of designs, processes, contexts, and situations." from the Wikipedia .. :) i was beginnign to think this was a flopper .. you give me hope Kubla .. so glad you read and left tracks :)
E.

[kublakhan27]

It does help indeed E, I learned something that I did not know before...many thanks :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the words and the photos. The strong description led to the good ending.
"frozen memories
thawing in currents demands
digging in the ash to remember"
I like my frozen memories. Something to write about. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[J. K. Beach]

A seamless collaboration with a beautiful bouncing baby poem the result... and look, it has Frieda's eyes. It also has rich and funny metaphors and layers of meaning--just what every poem needs to live and thrive. Great job you two!

[MagicAl]

Great work both! Hindsight and reflection really are wonderful things.. can relate to this so well! Love the concept behind this piece.. :)

[Rene Salinas]

I loved it and I well be damned if I can say exactly with precision what it is going on here but the colossal amount of intensity and the fact that every line that passes contributes one more piece it makes it frantic. And whatever went wrong when described like this "determinism held like muddied arrogance trying desperately to dance" jesus!! it makes me want for it to go wrong just so I can feel like this.
And that bit were in retrospect"so simple to see when turning pages looking back " that is pure wit of the evilish kind. Hilarious how ironic those moments are. And when "when windows of reason shut the mind" oh yeah throw all that logic away because who needs logic anyway when we are about to brake anyhow.

Damn it ! That was an invitation to a view of a " Day to Rememeber".

Thankyou so much I don't mind this collaborative enterprises at all

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you so much for your generous review .. so glad you enjoyed this bit of a bender
E.

[Cassie]

Nice collaboration to you two my greatest friends, It is hard to tell who wrote which stanza, very impressive. I particularly love the last three lines...

[KWP]

well don't you two make a splendid team .. I enjoy seeing bits of both of you in there

'determinism held like muddied arrogance
trying desperately to dance'

one should never allow themselves to be chained to a pole by muddy arrogance when life is calling them to dance .... this is certainly a life mantra right there

funny the lessons we can see just waving their hands in farewell if we just let them ... it all seems so damn easy when you look over your shoulder ... ahh but if we never had the experience at all, whatever would we have learnt....

with each re-read I enjoy it even more x x

LOVE LOVE LOVE and britches !!

[Einstein Noodle]

to put it in a Freida phrase .. "so jazzed" you like this one K! and tickled pink you would read and re-read! thank you!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

What a neat concept -- creeping determinism, sounds like my road to divorce. I didn't quite get the pairing of the pic, and the music is blank.

[Einstein Noodle]

could not find music so went with Captain Hindsight .. should not be blank .. the pic also has to do with hind sight .. however.. creeping determinism is a theory of which hindsight is only a part .. could not find adequate representation in a pic nor music .. :{
E.

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮This is one hell of a collaboration. It gave me chills, quite literally. Brilliant work, all of you.╰☆╮

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmmm chills .. how interesting! i can see how it would when creeping determinism is applied to things like National Security .. really appreciate you reading and your comments
E.

[Cory Barrett]

nice job to the both of you. Hindsight never sounded so good.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) you must know i appreciate your reading and comments; im getting use to your real name finally .. it takes a while for the elderly :)
E.

[Matching Socks]

What's that saying hind sight is 20/20?
:-)
Great collaboration you two.