Bite Me

tongue in cheek sort of...there's a theory that the soul weighs 21 grams as concluded in tests done by Dr. MacDougall in 1901

Bite me

    like you mean it    

       don't beat

         around the bush,

  you want a a piece of this

     better get a grip &

            dig in deeper

  played this game repeatedly,

     I know the rules

             there ain't no lines 

                that can't be crossed,

killed my spirit a while back

  not gonna be an encore,

     before I'm 21 grams down again,

                  you'll be eating realities' dust 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Well, now you're talking Mrs.R ;) Of course the first thing that hit me was the bawdy (no pun intended!) connotations, but the deeper I got into it, the darker it got, till I was in pitch-blackness by the end...there is a lot of despair in this piece, and it's a different kind of delivery from you...this has very much an urban feel to it, but yes, it's still Frieda...I know of no other who could work the '21 grams' motif to such vivid effect...you have again proven your boundless diversity, and your lovely taste in music ;) Incredible stuff my dear...always incredible stuff...xo

[Frieda P]

Make up your mind Benji :) You know I look forward to your reviews, made my night, thanks sweetie :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha You know that's not my strong suit Mrs.R...I'm always happy when I can make your night though :) xo

[Frieda P]

Woo featured review, this music makes me wanna dance anyway, but now I'm doing the happy dance. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Always an occasion that calls for a happy dance ;)

[Boranus]

this is good. it has bite to it. it's like a ballerina that refuses to tiptoe. she stomps.

[David Scott]

Ha! Clever girl you... I have always wanted just a little nibble...
21 grams eh?
I think there is more than you realize to go around. A feast indeed.

[Frieda P]

Oh WOOO so happy to see you, now my Frieday night is complete! What you tawkin bout Willis, were you looking at my tush? haha Seriously, how the heck you doing Scott, you've been missed xo

[David Scott]

:)
Thanks Frieda. Great to spend a moment in your world.

[Frieda P]

So are you coming back crankypants?

[David Scott]

I'm happy lovey! :-p
I'll be here from time to time I'm sure.
I know you understand.
Cranky pants. ? Ha. No! Not me. Your too funny.

[Fran Marie]

a biting, stinging, sexy write with cool sassy tone to it...well done!!

[Fran Marie]

a biting, stinging, sexy write with cool sassy tone to it...well done!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Fran!

[Tate Morgan]

Oh that was brisk lol Well i remember reading bout this guy and his assumptions on the weight of a soul.I can say mine is much heavier lol

[Frieda P]

Bite me Tate lol

[Tate Morgan]

before or after lol?

[DIVYA]

A very sexy read Frieda. A good hard bite dug deep into the flesh does it every time. Your pen never fails to enthrall!

[Frieda P]

I knew you'd get it Divya...! :)

[DIVYA]

Of course Frieda ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

Bite me
like you mean it
don't beat
around the bush,

LOL. I'm sorry my dirty mind brought me to bad places with this lines. A flame poem among the best, Frieda:)

[Frieda P]

LOL I think you're the only one that picked up on that Pryde. ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

Probably just the only one uncouth enough to mention it:)

[Frieda P]

Around this place, I highly doubt it. ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

:)………………………...

[writing mojo]

sunk my teeth into this one and ended up with nubby gums..really stole my incisor-able appetite love the chomping cadence not many sharks of their bloody craft can stomach such an appetite for surfacing passion ...great piece

[Frieda P]

Gotta love 'incisor-able' appetites, thanks for this feast of a review mojo.

[Baby Ricochet]

Kinda sexy with a weird ending. Good one

[Frieda P]

I like weird, thanks Baby.