My Own Free Will

another non-rhyme poem... please review?

I’m not going to change for you.

For once I thought you loved me for who I am.

I thought you loved my smile.

I thought you loved my laugh.

I thought you loved my voice.

I thought you loved me for me.

But, you tell me to lose weight.

And I ask myself, “oh what weight?”

One-hundred, thirty pounds,

Five feet, seven inches

What is there to lose?

It’s perfect weight,

It’s perfect height.

My height is fate

Yet my weight is free will.

But,
I have complete control.

One-hundred complete control.

I’m not going to change for you

EVER.

And to think that you loved me for me.

Author's Note

I don't really like writing non-rhyming poetry, because how is it poetry? Well, like what I written, it doesn't feel like poetry to me. So tell me what you think?

Reviews

[ShaneBerry]

even though this did not rhyme, it had a very bold flow and was very direct. a very personal write, loved it! more women need to be like this, weight is free will, nothing is stopping you from gaining it or loosing it. u tell him girl! this seemed like a big "BOOHYAAAAH!" to that guy! great write!

[Steve]

I read this again and it seems kind of inspirational! Who the hell is this guy? RUN!

[Steve]

I think this is poetry! Nice job. You use the language very well and yet this is really sad too.

[Libby]

You lose flow at the end but otherwise I really liked this. I like the subject, no one should change for another. c:

[MandaBear]

It is definatly interesting

[Eileen]

FLOWWWWWW, there's some but not enough. Keep going. :D

And yes poems that don' rhyme ARE poems. They're more sophisticated.