let your heart call out

i will stand by you as a guardian

When trouble is all you know,

Let your heart call out,

I’ll be right beside you,

 

When you stand at the edge ready to jump,

Let your heart call out,

I’ll catch you and fly you to the ground,

 

When sadness takes over

Let your heart call out

I’ll hold you tight in a feathered embrace

 

When your dreams are full of shadows

And your heart screams in fear

I will lay beside you till the morning sun rises

 

When you feel that you don’t belong in this world

I’ll come before your heart calls

Show you the love that I feel

Give you a reason to live

 

When you call to me and I don’t come

Remember the love that I feel

For I have given myself to save your soul

And this is all I can offer

Reviews

[Esana Bridges]

Second to last stanza, first line "fell" --> "feel".
Your info bar "I well stand by you as a guardian" --> "I will stand by you as a guardian".

It's very sweet, and it makes me wish that I could find a love like this. I love your repetition of "When". You portrayed true love very well - always there for somebody, there when you need them, there before you need them, always there, even when someone is gone. I also like the idea that your "heart" can call out - love is something that doesn't have to be vocal.

[Sylvia E. Lioness]

So sweet--it was beautifully writen. The theme of love and selfless caring is so pure and powerful.

[Alyssa]

I really enjoyed this, great read. It's very sweet. Only thing I'd say to maybe think about changing is the "Let your heart call out" line thats repeated three times but not in the rest of the poem, it might flow a little better if it was there throughout or just once.
Enjoyed :)

[Wolfwind]

Absolutely beautiful! Wonderful words that weave hope, joy and compassion all into the protective arms of a guardian. Excellent craftsmanship!

Aaron

[MetBySunlight]

Such a beautiful piece (:

[13ReasonsWhy]

i loved it. beautiful.

[Krystyna Herst]

I really liked this piece. It seems like the character is a very trustworthy person.

[Time's The Bond]

Its so romantic and sweet

[Jesse Jacques]

its so sweet. awesome

[Rowan Storm]

My heart cried once.

[Esana Bridges]

Last stanza, first line, second to last word "you" --> "yours" I think
Last stanza, third line, consider capitalizing "i'll"

The last stanza is so beautiful - so, so beautiful - to find someone that you can't live without, with whom it would be better to die with then live without is a concept that is explored so often and yet there is nothing that can really express that intense emotion. I think that it's one of the most beautiful concepts in the world, and really, it's so beautiful.