If an Angel appears

If an Angel appears

A Poem by The Shadow of the Dawn

If an Angel appears before you,

Held out his hand and said “come join me, I’ll show you where the heavens meet the earth”

Would you take his hand, and let him take you away

 

If you take his hand, he would fly you over the mountains, over the rivers and over the never-ending oceans.

He could show you the beauty he sees in the world, he’ll show you...

 

If an Angel appears beside you,

Lays a hand on your shoulder and wiped away your tears

Would you slap his hand away and deny him that honour?

 

If you’d let him, he would make you smile with each passing day,

He’ll show you there is good in the world, he’ll show you...

 

If an Angel appears behind you,

Wraps his arms around you and with a single beat of his great wings blows your troubles away

Would you pull away, and say no

 

If you’d let him, he’ll fight for you with all his heart, he will fight for you until he couldn’t fight anymore

He’ll give anything to hold you even if the cost was his grace, he’ll give anything...

 

Everyone waits for their Angel but no one looks for the Angels that have already given their wings to watch you rise from the shadows,

Everyone waits for their angel but no one looks for the Angels that have already stood by you and fight for you every day,

© 2011 The Shadow of the Dawn


Author's Note

The Shadow of the Dawn
i would like to thank a friend of mine for helping me fix the problems that you all found in it :) thanks charlie :)

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Puts a hand on your shoulder and wipes away you** tears-- should be your

If you let him, he’ll fight for you with all his heart, he’ll fight for you tell** he can’t fight anymore-- Should be until.

This is a very nice piece. Some formatting needs to be done so it isnt such an eye-sore, and looked appealing to the eye. But other than the two mistakes I mentioned, I didnt find anything else. This is a well worded piece, and very true, honest. Everyone is looking for whats ahead, not what is right infront of them. Keep up the good work.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


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this is amazing poem..
i like it.. :D

really, sometimes i feel it too
there somebody that help me, but i just say no
maybe that is my angel :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Amazing. This brought me to tears with its beauty.

Posted 7 Years Ago


very beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Angels..... hmmmm. Thinky.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow...just wow. I almost cry reading this. this is an extremely amazing poem :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

that was really cute, and an your angel in disguise could be your best friend.. or enemy, you never know :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The visuals in this piece made the message and feeling behind it very evident. When you used phrases such as "Would you slap his hand away and say don’t", it made me really think about the meaning behind it and made me think of the phrase which came before it (If an Angel appears beside you, Puts a hand on your shoulder and wipes away your tears) and think "Well that sounds kind of nice, actually." Phrases like that really made the connection to the reader real. The only problem I had was that some lines were were too long. I would prefer them to be separated, but that may just be me personally. Other than that, I really enjoyed this poem.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"come join me..." should be "Come join me..."

I liked it, until the final two lines. They just didn't fit with the poem as a whole. They were too long, too unwieldy to fit. You could try breaking them up, the might fit the rhythm better then. This happens a few times, actually. It seems like there are some extra words in this poem. You might want to take that with a grain of salt, though, since most all of my writing involves short lines.

As far as the themes go, I liked it. It was strong on what it was saying. It just wasn't as eloquent as it could have been.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good job

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Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is good the way it is in my opinion. It made sence to me and I hope to read more of your work!!

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Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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