Stormy Weather

A metaphor for pain, inspired by true events

A sideways storm,

alluring from my window.

The snow, flakes like falling corn,

sparked a misty wind, but slowly

 

the spotty flakes fell

from cloud to ground,

each unique, but until

one is found

 

they drop anonymous

as rain, which can’t be

brushed off a scarf, but

soaks anon into clothing.

 

A lonely snow storm

will slow by its own

strength, lay to rest, sore,

born to simmer as summer grows.

Reviews

[Michael W. Farrelly]

I love the allusion to the troubles we deal with being like a storm. Very nice write, and the form strikes a chord of lonliness. Sorry it took me a while to get to my read requests, though. Thanks for sharing.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Interesting piece. I would write more about it, but I am stuck in read request Hell and working my way out.

Great job!

-Gabe

[the_real_me]

I like this poem. it's great because I love both winter and summer.

[Vince]

You really gave the seasons personality. Most of the time people talk about the weather or nature for atmospheric effect, but you used it a little differently, which is a good thing. I'm a more literal type of person, so I didn't really get the pain metaphor, but that's the great thing about words. Different people take different things away from it. It'd be great if the reader felt everything the writer felt exactly, but what's the fun in that. Literary critics would lose their jobs! Anyway, the last line of the third stanza is great, soaking anon!

[MorganLyn]

Love the descriptions!! Great imagery! I've only seen and felt the snow a few times...but thanks to you I can add another to my list!
Feel free to send me requests!
-D

[No One Important]

I feel the snow on the tip of my nose from readin this...very descriptive and facinating...

[laceyjane23]

i really like this poem! very nice choice in descripitve words! you are very creative when it comes to putting lines together, keep up the good work!
laceyjane

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are truly inspiring to read! I really love your nature pieces...the snow, the rain and the trees. Perhaps I already told you that, but it bares repeating!

Do not hesitate to send me a request. I shall comply!

[Virellius an Fiach]

Another great piece, in my opinion. I like the style. Reminds me of my own work, in a way. XD

[J.P.O.et]

I love the ending, Great decriptive verse comparing the storm of snow
to your pain as you said but as every painfull snowstorm inside our souls
breaks up and clears there is that hope of summer and its soothing
warming effects of being happy again, Excellent stuff
J.P.O.et