Blinded

Just like the sun,

your smiles so bright.

Find me;

illuminate my night.

 

Overwhelmed I am,

Just a shadow; no touch.

This empty void,

at times, is just too much.

 

Like the sun,

penetrate me with life.

Rescue me;

from the internal hate,

this strife.

 

Blinded by my darkness!

 

Blinded by my

evil deeds!

 

Blinded by my

sinful needs!

 

Like the sun,

your smiles so bright.

Cure my darkness,

blind me;

with your light!

Reviews

[Neville]

Well I could not put it better myself ---- I mean the positive views and opinions of so many of my reviewing predecessors ... I love your "Blinded by my
evil deeds!

Blinded by my
sinful needs!

Crammed full and overflowing with subliminally erotic messages that tantalise and tease. A real treat at breakfast time. Shame that I have to set off for the gym, but I will be back. AGT's N

[Weewee]

Like the sun,
your smiles so bright.
Cure my darkness,
blind me;
with your light!


Interesting to read this. It's almost like a cry for help. A need to step out of the darkness.

[...]

Loved this! So beckoning and soulful! Awesome bleed!

[UnderCompulsion]

I really like this.It's really beautiful.As always your poetry is more then great! :)

[EMF]

Dear Mr Muse.
Just a quick note to let you know, that your missus made my heart melt with this one. I know it's not normal to write to the partner of a writer, but I don't do normal, so sue me. It is one of the most beautiful love poems you can wish for. Oh. Don't worry. I'm not professing Love, just incredible admiration and that last stanza... You jammy get.

[Chris Yip]

A girl blinded by the world opens up to the bright light of her lovers love thats shines into her darkened world. The love of her lover sets her free from her blindness. Well written and expressed. Great stuff!!

[Bare trees]

Receptive, imploring, and desirous all at the same time. Nice rhymes as well. Good poem.

[styxfan]

This reminds me of a few people I've known in my life. Overall, its very powerful. The part that speaks to me the most is

Overwhelmed I am,
Just a shadow; no touch.
This empty void,
at times, is just too much.

It reminds me of a few of the poems I've done, Alcatraz, comes to mind. Good job :)

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

this was such an amazing piece, it had so much emotion and passion behind every line... also the flow, structure and just the way it was written were perfect... great write really enjoyed :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I like how you spun the blindness as a good thing... very nice work.

[Arthur Henn]

Muse, this is beyond the warmth of the sun's rays... A favorite.