its a beautiful day!

its a beautiful day!

A Poem by Shapirta
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please read!

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Wake up! wake up!
sleepyhead,
listen to what I said.
c**k-a-doodle doo,
get out of bed,
it's a beautiful day!

© 2014 Shapirta


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I think it needs more added to it, though you might have been planning to that already. It sure wakes me up.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Hi omg its gooorgus totally you are amazing

Posted 6 Years Ago


:D, a nice poem here to read

Posted 6 Years Ago


nice, short poem.brought a smile on my face.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I LOVE THIS!! I could see myself waking the kids up with this poem in the morning!! Very, very nice! Thank you for sharing =D

Posted 6 Years Ago


LOL ... this is fun little one... I like poems that make me smile... :))

Posted 6 Years Ago


Haha! That definetely made me laugh! I do wake my sister up like that when she's around.. and she sticks her tongue out and turns away from me..

Posted 6 Years Ago


Haha, this is cute. I imagine a rooster hopping up and down on top of it's owner telling him to wake up. I liked it a lot. =)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Shapirta

6 Years Ago

thanks! maybe i can add this to the book of nursery rhymes I am making!
Ashira Macy

6 Years Ago

I think it would go well in a nursery rhyme book. :-)
Shapirta

6 Years Ago

thanks! =)
This is a cute poem. Your tone is very happy and I don't see a lot of poems like that these days. I think you could make it more clear as to who the speaker is and who the speaker is talking to. I also want to know more about the beautiful day. What does it look like? What makes it beautiful to the speaker? Also the rhyme scheme is good, the only thing is that the "c**k-a-doodle doo" line throws off the flow a little bit. Overall, good job! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago



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dude hi!, NY



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