What We Used To Be

What We Used To Be

A Poem by KATHY SUE SILLS
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A COUPLE GROWN APART TRYING TO RECAPTURE THEIR LOVE!

"

 

Who are you?

We used to know each

other so well,

but now we've grown apart

we don't even recognize each other

 

We used to be so close

you  used to be

my friend, my confidant,my everything

now we're more like enemies

all we do is fight

 

Do you ever ask yourself

Who I am?

we  used to say loving words

to each other but now all

our words do is cut each other

to the bone, leaving our blood

spilling out on the floor

 

Can we get back what we had?

What we used to be?

my insides crumble like an earthquake

at the thought of losing you

 

With my head hung down ,

tears spilling from my eyes

I stretch my hand out toward you,

hoping you won't turn away

that would be my undoing

 

As I raise my head toward you

my eyes grow wide as I see

your hand out stretched to

we clasped hands and stare at

each other, promising to get back

what we used to be

 

 

 

 

© 2010 KATHY SUE SILLS


Author's Note

KATHY SUE SILLS
Had alittle hard time with commas and such! so any help will be nice!

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Easy to fall into love. Hard to maintain. Most of us forget the things that put two people together. We need to tell our number two we need and care for them. I told my children. Love is give and take. Most times it seem all we will do is give. But it is alright. Better then sleeping alone. I like this poem. "what we used to be". Those words can lead you in the wrong direction. Better to search for the bridge that put two folks together. A excellent poem.
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Posted 13 Years Ago


I like it. and with the commas you could do what I do and just not add them in unless it's a dire need.

Posted 13 Years Ago


you have loosing it's losing but other than that this was fantastic!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very touching write. Sounds like love was meant to be, but we can't always recapture what we had. I could sense the honest raw emotions in this write. Lovely.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Good poem Imagination. You've taken a delicate topic and gave it an uplifting conclusion. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is so sweet.
I think you did a VERY GOOD JOB LOL :)!!!

This definitely depicts many, many trial testers relationship's go through...

Posted 13 Years Ago


So full of fear and hope. A wonderful poem. I especially love the tender ending. You could have twisted this ending, made it sad, never renewing their love and yet you kept this sweet. Answering a small prayer for those of us out there who always wish for the happy ending to a touching love story.

Posted 13 Years Ago


That ever elusive spot made of good times and memories, lightning in a bottle sometimes. With a little work and alot of patience and understanding, the possibility is always still there....nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


It felt a little clumsy to me, but, that could also be the results of a tired mind.. I like how you took us on a moment of self reflection, painful as it may be.. and the message of hope in the last stanza.... Isn't funny how we allow ourselves to fall disillusioned, full of resentment and anger, when all we really want.. is to find the happiness in the love that keeps us together.. Thanks for sharing, I liked it..

Posted 13 Years Ago


I could see the rift between the two...and the chemistry
had seemed to fade, but some force was still keeping them
in close proximity to one another.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on November 28, 2010
Last Updated on December 5, 2010
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KATHY SUE SILLS
KATHY SUE SILLS

Harrisville, MS



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