Insomnia

My second post.

-Insomnia-

 

You have made it.
You’ve just made your self invincible.
The fact that you own this heart of mine
Rendered me vulnerable:
Frozen with a smile,
Dead with your goodbye,
Crazy

In a way that I almost wanted.

 

And here I am,
A soul stuck in a sleepless state,
Writing poems just to forget
What they really were about:
For longing yet again is not allowed,
‘Cause you got your eyes fixed
In an opposite direction,
That I can hardly see your face,
Your eyes,
Your smile.

 

But let me wait,
At least.
So that I
May be able to understand
Why...

Why of all the constellations to choose from
I chose the farthest:

The one--most difficult to reach,

 

Then slowly,
Just maybe,
I’ll forget the glow...

...that you possess.

 

Author's Note

comments very much appreciated.
my second post.

Reviews

[Helena]

Wow! Great work my friend! I was mesmerised from beginning to end....the emotions flowed so beautifully throughout this. I felt the sadness of the loss of love....the confusion trying to come to terms with it. Some truly lovely stanza's from your pen. One awesome poem! Keep writing, don't stop!

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

All I can say is that this is really, REALLY good.

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Haunting...beautifully written.well done

[Emily B]

ohhhh, I think you know something about poetry . . . this is wonderful

and Neruda is one of my old favorites

[Tahna]

This makes me sigh in that great sexy way (hehe)...A beautiful write. The words flow so beautifully..
Lovely lovely

[Loner]

U are a magician where expression is concerned.

[54321]

I love how well your grammar makes the poem flow! SO easy to read it's refreshing! Amazing second post! I love the pauses and line breaks. It flows so nicely.

[Inci]

very nice indeed