Insomnia

My second post.

-Insomnia-

 

You have made it.
You’ve just made your self invincible.
The fact that you own this heart of mine
Rendered me vulnerable:
Frozen with a smile,
Dead with your goodbye,
Crazy

In a way that I almost wanted.

 

And here I am,
A soul stuck in a sleepless state,
Writing poems just to forget
What they really were about:
For longing yet again is not allowed,
‘Cause you got your eyes fixed
In an opposite direction,
That I can hardly see your face,
Your eyes,
Your smile.

 

But let me wait,
At least.
So that I
May be able to understand
Why...

Why of all the constellations to choose from
I chose the farthest:

The one--most difficult to reach,

 

Then slowly,
Just maybe,
I’ll forget the glow...

...that you possess.

 

Author's Note

comments very much appreciated.
my second post.

Reviews

[Helena]

Wow! Great work my friend! I was mesmerised from beginning to end....the emotions flowed so beautifully throughout this. I felt the sadness of the loss of love....the confusion trying to come to terms with it. Some truly lovely stanza's from your pen. One awesome poem! Keep writing, don't stop!

[Joshua Donahue]

very emotional and moving!

[Nicole Clarice Anna Wie..]

Brilliantly beautiful. I relate to this poem in so many ways. It is an instant favorite of mine (even if I had to squint the whole time to read the font)... however, I am very pleased that I forced my eyes to focus, for the flow and diction were perfect. This is a literary piece of art. Thank you for sharing this - and I wish there were something bad I could say about it because I know these positive reviews are not the most helpful and I can usually find something to constructively criticise. Well I guess that's saying something about you. Great write.
Cheers - N.C.A.W.

[Miss Coral]

I really enjoyed reading this piece... it got better and better. c: Great job.

[FocusedAmnesia]

The emotions flood my senses when I read this,

"Why of all the constellations to choose from
I chose the farthest:
The one--

Most difficult to reach"

Definitely my favorite stanza. It reminded me of something I'm currently dealing with.

This is a really great read. Wonderfully written.

[The Fatal Lover]

I enjoyed this. Fun to read and it kept my attention. Great job. =)

[olivia]

oh my, this landed on a soft spot in my heart.
it is so beautiful!

[KaySea]

amazing

[Jessica Mai]

Wow, i don't know.. this kind of made my heart gasp inside my chest... if you know what i mean. Just beautifully written. The last 2 stanzas are simply breath taking. Lovely lovely write.

[fliptheskript]

Really enjoyed it. We always tend to want what we can't have

[Gracie-San]

This was beautiful. I was completely into it all the way through and the descriptions and metaphors were used were elegant and beautiful.

Good write. :)