tissue.

i can feel 
my already 
too-loosely woven 
fibres 
shredding 
between the pads 
of your rough fingertips 

isn't there 
a better way 
to claim me 
than to pick away

so diligently 
at my psyche?

Reviews

Although i admit i am intrigued by the concept, i really feel that stanza two is not as strong as stanza one. Stanza one delivers a gripping image (a really great image may i add!!!) where as stanza two delivers, by the ending moment, an abstract concept that comes out a bit empty for the reader. It's also an extremely clinical term. I suppose the reader would more or less need to see your "psyche," in order to really feel the concept. I don't think the word by itself allows the emotion to really show. I love this poem so far. Thanks.

[Nobody.]

ouch! this feeling seems so familiar to me. what question! amazing writing!
cheers!

[Robin]

emotional textures felt in this readers mindscape .. I never question the placement of your brush strokes ~

[Creepy Swine Guy]

"too-loosely woven", "shredding", "pick away" and "psyche"

BOY! that surely paints a very vivid and scratching picture. And so true. Some people know how to get under our socks and itch and pick at us so that we cannot concentrate on daily life.

Well executed lady.

[Tony]

The long pause between Inflamed and the familiar discomfort of hesitation, uncomfortably close to the agony of regret?
Or those missed moments of ecstasy, interrupted by counting the nexts?
Pretty. Melodic.
Neat.
With a little love in place of empty verbs and adjectives, the poetry of jenniewren.

[c.m.]

Well this is amazing...and even amazing is too little of a word for it. This has a great message and wonderful imagery. Another one of yours I wish I had written....lovely piece, once again....

[Crowley]

Whew.....that was a shot heard round the world. Tough words for a Saturday morning, but a super tight poem with an immense message. Great writing....