straight jacket

06/2011

I'm a thespian in my own phantasmagoria

a runner in this marathon of subconsciousness

slowly weaving this tale of sycophancy 

I am my own tragedian on the stage of my mind

a artist of mass self destruction

painting horrors on the canvas of my insides

I am the creator of this ornament of affliction 

a architect designing this projection of a fiasco

building these walls to contain utter obscurity 

how I wish I could awake from this chimera

that these spawned malignant spirits would release me

to what remains of this disintegrated existence

but I can't come back to reality

the bars of this dream are to strong

illusion had become my actuality

this vagueness is now my verity

Reviews

[TJ]

First of all I gotta say the picture you chose for this one was awesome lol
This insanity laden piece was wonderfully written.

"but I can't come back to reality
the bars of this dream are to strong
illusion had become my actuality"
These three lines are just genius!

Very imaginative and vivid write!!

[Dark Beauty]

Great creative writing,good word choice to convey it- Awesome

[Jeremy Baker]

Ezquisite word choice! Direct and expressive - that opening line is awesome! Great writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

I had to read this poem a few times. The language is amazing. You had me from the first line.
"I am the creator of this ornament of affliction
a architect designing this projection of a fiasco
building these walls to contain utter obscurity "
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Thea]

Wow! I ♥ the video...He amazes me! :)))

Anyway, this such a creative writing...

"but I can't come back to reality
the bars of this dream are to strong
illusion had become my actuality
this vagueness is now my verity"

That last stanza is so powerful...Excellent writing... :)))

[Candy]

I believe that TJ is totally right! It's an awesome picture!! And the lines she have picked out is amazing!!
I almost got the chills as I read this!

[Amila Jay]

"I am my own tragedian on the stage of my mind" - effective line
very nice piece of work!!! keep it up:D

[light and ashes]

This poem really takes us into the unhinged mind, dark and brilliant. The music was perfect for it.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Bravo!
This was original from your part. By adding the music and this dark poem it adds to the effect of something dark and sorrowful growing. Something eerie that's waiting to haunt down the nearest soul for its own art...
"I am my own tragedian on the stage of my mind
a artist of massive self destruction
painting horrors on the canvas of my insides"

Those horrors are what really make art, doesn't it? ;)