public enemies

06/2011

two worlds apart, separate lives

tangled on the battle front

                 bodies lay mangled at our hands

oh the forest we have torn down

desperately trying to reach each other  

                 oh the cities we have laid to waste

only to be in each others arms

acting on our criminal attributes 

                  reduced to our primal instincts 

now we're riding around, raining terror

our bullets shower in waves

                   they will never take us alive, my love

feeling like a scene Bonnie & Clyde 

our essence is on this long road 

                   our liveliness beats from the speakers

you laugh at the blue lights in the mirror

pointing at the absurd billboards

                    the scenery flies by in perfection

in this moment I am truly happy

please don't wake me up

Author's Note

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

WOW!
There is so much in this short but powerful piece of writing! The metaphors and comparison to the army battlefield is really exhilarating. The poem creates a speed that matches that of the field. Though I comprehend the message you convey, my stronger interpretation of this is totally different to yours - for I do not see the cars so much - instead I relate to relations, changing and growth of landscapes.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
A

[Kenneth The Poet]

Cool stuff. Reminds me of the Modern Day Bonnie and Clyde even.

[Kyla H]

A truely unique outake on the lengths to keep love bound, nice comparisons as well. Your word flow is light and holds a state of serenity though it is talking about mass destruction. Anyway, very nicely done.

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is really good. :) It reminds me of a song called Lay Me Down by The Dirty Heads. :) Good song.

[Alicia Hirshey]

I like the subject you went with. It seemed jam packed full of emotion and you know me. I love it when i feel emotion coming from a poem. Favorited.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

loved these lines:
"they will never take us alive, my love
feeling like a scene Bonnie & Clyde "
...and also these last 2 lines:
"in this moment I am truly happy
please don't wake me up"
...this was really good :D
awesome picture and title too

[Ashli The Amazing]

great write. very nice [: aha i love Bonnie And Clyde!

[Rene Velez]

good write, great ending...

[alerodri]

power, rush, all the things that makes us feel alive tha danger theemotions it really aplies to the ideal of u only feel alive when u face death, it is dark ,emotional, and even sexy it is perfect mix of teen age anarchy and passion

[Coyote Poetry]

The emotion of dying in a chase or a battle. I was a Soldier for 15 years. Stood on holy ground of war. Wanted to test what I could do. Most people need to feel alive. Old world can bet boring. I lie the desire and pace of this poem.
"they will never take us alive, my love
feeling like a scene Bonnie & Clyde "
Thank you for a outstanding poem.
Coyote