dearest naive

dearest naive

A Chapter by joshua deathdealer
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09/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Seven)

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Screams echo out into the streets
terror laced sound waves detonating
off my decaying eardrums

I am a shadow of my former self
standing over you in this dark alley
scenery wilts around

the death that seeps from my skin
the pores leaking poisonous sweat
dripping on the ashen ground

Beware of a kind face and a
pristine stare, it could be just
a mask that I wear

                     more screams 

you should have listened to 
your friends...


© 2013 joshua deathdealer


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you know, the third stanza has an utter intensity...the words you used hold a super power related to death, decease and anarchy. It really adds to the whole poem a darker feeling. well, It is very well-expressed and your words were exactly screaming out loud. Love it from the beginning to the end.

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that's good stuff, great read...

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I love the darkness that surrounds this poem. You are a awesome poet and this was another great read.

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it builds as you move through the poem..to a chilling conclusion..nice job.

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That's very powerful. I especially love the fianl line "You should have listened to your friends." Good job. It kept me hooked.

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powerful... especially at the end i think. i like this a lot, held my attention to the power and feeling.

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Sometimes we need to heed the words around us because those can be later thanked for. I love the dark intensity as the poem progresses down.

"Beware of a kind face and a
pristine stare, it could be just
a mask that I wear"

This stanza in particular sends a chill down your spine. That's how powerful this poem is.

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Intense and dark. An excellent write

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I like this poem. No wasted words. Direct and cold. I like the strong statements and the very nice ending. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

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They should have listened to their friends. Nice work.

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Gotta love the imagery here! Very well expressed, Joshua!
Like it... :)))

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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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