misconception

misconception

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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10/2011

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Here we lay surrounded by your memory. 
Self created to alleviate the scars that
etch my soul. This propagated selfishness
burns around us as I desire to stay and 
let this collapsing thought consume me.

You look up at me with admiring eyes.
Eyes that remind me of someone else.
One that awaits outside of this spawned
realm for my love and guidance. This can't
be you. You wouldn't keep me from life.

So unable to cope with your hapless passing
that I have copied your presence in my mind.
An peaceable avenue for me to hold onto 
our delicate memories in a narcissistic 
way. I am dissipating every new moment.

The ground begins to crack upon my 
realization that this appearance isn't 
really you at all. Suddenly everything falls 
away and a raging sea materializes.
I am aboard a ship sailing for the exit.

Turbulent waves rise to bar the looming
outlet. Pushing the vessel to and fro.
Storm clouds flood the sky and rumble 
as your anger grows. Lighting cracks
and punches through the salty air.

Your simulated screams echo with the wind as
waves reach to try and drag me backwards.
Towards the center of this destruction.
My mind cuts down it's own advances,
severing the ties that pull at my heart.

The rickety craft drifts out of my 
fabricated spell. Carrying me safely
to reality. "Daddy" my daughter cries
as I awake. I reach to hold her. This
is what you would have really wanted.

I know because I can feel your smile.

© 2011 joshua deathdealer


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beautiful thoughts...would you consider trying wording it this way?...

"Here we lay surrounded by this self- created memory,
alleviating scars which etch my soul.
This propagated selfishness
burns around us,
as I desire to stay ,
letting this collapsing thought consume."

does that sound a bit more like you wished it to sound?




Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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"You look up at me with admiring eyes.
Eyes that remind me of someone else."
Aw...A very fine piece...Excellent work...
♥ the ending too! :)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


beautiful thoughts...would you consider trying wording it this way?...

"Here we lay surrounded by this self- created memory,
alleviating scars which etch my soul.
This propagated selfishness
burns around us,
as I desire to stay ,
letting this collapsing thought consume."

does that sound a bit more like you wished it to sound?




Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Awesome write:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A surprise ending to the poem. The powerful description made the situation come alive. Can't lose control when things lose balance and common sense. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on October 14, 2011
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Tags: love, memories, dark, mirage

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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