you should have known better

11/2011 (Blood type B: Installment Eight)

I have stormed these halls more days

     than most have ever seen

Years have blended together into

     a long, blood soaked night

Keen to replace the soul of

     a beloved mortal that died before her time 

     I remember the day her hand 

slipped from mine and she rose above the sky

    Leaving me alone and forsaken on this doomed plane

Here I have lain in wait for someone

    Anyone that bears her similar presence

Many have came and fell into my treacherous traps

I would give anything to just be dead

    To awaken from this gray fog that hangs

overhead, however this is just a inanimate dream for me

    So I will drink what is left of your precious time

swallowing, greedily, all your sticky hopes for a brighter tomorrow

    I will take my vengefulness out on the pulsing vein

    that graces the lengths of your throat

Give to me your lifeline and partake in my immortality

    Find in me your deepest and darkest desires   

Don't be afraid of your destiny, embrace this chance

    This accident that is soon to befall you

Lay in my anesthetic hold, forever close your eyes

    

Author's Note

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

I love how this could be a destructive relationship of a human seducer/womanizer with a girl, enslaved to his own lust--not merely just vampire lust. It applies to real life as well as fiction. A lot of guys chase after affairs to fill up some void in their lives, as they walk around through empty, gray existences; that's why a true womanizer is, quite literally, a cold-hearted psychopathic "vampire," sucking the love out of others and never able to return it--they've lost the ability to truly love someone. The darkness of this piece isn't really vampiric--it mirrors a human heart. That's why it's so good

[BreeBree1983]

Very well said..

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

F*****g outstanding you use the dark well my friend and although ive been known as funny writer i love dark writes and this is a trrue painting in that sense great flow to it honestly im a fan cheers Gonzo

[patricia]

great stuff, but glad i only know you on writers cafe, i sure wouldn't wanna meet you down a dark alleyway! ha ha...Thanks.

[realmwriter]

Exceptional write my friend. Your comparison of death to love and wanting soul mate as fair and beautiful as she was is spot on. This is lonely and searching. I get the since of desperation and utter longing. Very well done.

[Cassie Fraga]

OOOOOOOO- can feel the burn of this emotion you lay in between your lines!!

**Here I have lain in wait for someone
Anyone that bears her similar presence
Many have came and fell into my treacherous traps** ((joshua deathdealer))

my fav. part!! great read indeed!! **tips my lyrical wand to you**

[Forgotten]

i liked it

[johnnyqueer]

This is a really great poem, I love the story. Nice write :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Wow... really nice, i like the depth in this write with the love. Love how you ended this too; real nice.

[Chris]

I like the taste(s)...

Chris

[Enigma]

Amazing word-play. Well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice vampire tale. I like the detail about emotion and desire of main character. Some stories and myths allow new and different storyline. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote