Third showing

There is one more show

it might be the last

so if you're ready

we'll have a blast

we'll make it slow and painful

never go too fast

direct your attention to the stage

as the light comes on at last

hope has been lost

never to be found

to this misery

he is bound

killing him slowly

no helping hand around

hanging above a tank

we lower him down, drowned

in his pain

never to be pulled back up

that will be his grave

nothing left of him

nothing left to save

he's gone now

watch as he will wave

Author's Note

your thoughts?

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Hmm this one seems different, it has more of a theater feel to it. The slow pain and depth of emotion fills this stage and poem, nicely done.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was dark and I really liked the emotions within this piece. It was amazingly awesome. I love the meaning of it as well. I loved the whole piece in general. Thanks for sharing.

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

Lush! Ooo this seemed fairly dark and mystical... I liked the way the reader can interpret what you've written in any way they like, because with this poem, its very easy to do that. It gives the reader more purpose to your poem. And therefore like it more

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Good finishing. I liked your writing. With regards.

[Roxi L]

Creepy. I love it

Writing keeps the dream alive
~V~

[DearSweetAgony]

I liked this write a lot. The beginning reminded me of Gangs Of New York when Bill was making a show out of wither or not he should kill Young Fallon. I don't know why but it just did. :) Great job, I enjoyed reading!

[Lynn]

It sounds like a poem about a messed up circus. I think it's cool

[Mikayla Rasmussen]

it ends the circus well. i like how a f*****g awesome poem had an amazing ending!

[Sarah]

nice. it ties up nice

[Your Perfect Disaster]

Very interesting.
The ending is what really got me.
You made it feel like we were actually watching, like we can actually feel the pain.