Falling

this boy has my feelings everywhere

He calls me his angel

And oh god, 

He's my favorite sin.

His lips melting my skin

Voice calling to me,

As if I were sweet like chocolate.

I see worship in his eyes

Lust written between the lines. 

I crave the feeling he gives me,

Gets me higher than amphetamines;

And he tastes better too. 

He guided me to my Spiritual Self

When I was calling to a god for help. 

Oh god what do I do-

He has me falling from heaven,

Call me Lucifer and let me burn.

He lit my morals on fire, 

Leaving an empty space I’ve yet to yearn.

Jesus Christ can't find me now

I'm the sheep that got away,

But I'm not lost I'm found.

I just pray to pay for my sins a different day.

Author's Note

*ive edited all the issues I had with it, this is the final draft (hopefully)

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

comment:
such a hot holy bombshell you are... esp. when it comes to literature.

review:
nice. very creatively as well as cleverly penned up poetry it is. some of my fav. lines are:

"I see worship in his eyes
Lust written between the lines... "

being an romantic-cum-erotic writer, i guess, such lines're seemed to be my most fav. the worth of holiness & darkness... both i find in such shorten leaf of verse. excellent work here.

rating:
100/100
undoubtedly, it's well penned write. must consider this the poetry of the day.

[Junebug]

Thank you so much!!! I am a very sexual person and I have a lot of fun writing about it

[Adam Adams]

yeah, i see that. xoxo

[drcornelius]

I really like the way this piece flows. It's full of powerful images. Great hook in the last line.

[Kathrin S]

Great poem, really well-written. My favorite lines were 'I see worship in his eyes
Lust written between the lines'.

The only one I wondered about was 'As if I were sweet like chocolate' - it seems a bit long compared to the ones that come before. But I'm not a poet myself, so I wouldn't be sure what/how/if to change it.

[Pete]

wrestling with decadence. contemplating guilty pleasures. well written and flows rather nicely. catchy title encompasses.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Gets me higher than amphetamines;"
This made me smile.. I like the flow of your composition.. Nicely penned longings 👍

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

I just pray to pay for my sins a different day. Maybe by falling in love with someone you know is the best way to get carried away. Well penned.

[iamshadowine]

Such a sweet poem ^_^
"But I'm not lost I'm found.
I just pray to pay for my sins a different day."
An amazing ending! I really like how it started and how it ended!
great job, keep it up! :)

keep writing :D

[Junebug]

thank you so much :)