Unrest

Thump thump thump
My heart clammers and jolts
Against my chest

Tick tick tick
The silver cloaked clock
Methodically maps my unrest

Purr purr purr
The cat slumbers below at my feet
Oblivious to the battle occurring within the sheets

In and out
I release a bated breath to the world

Please please please
I beg the sandman
To crust my eyes for sleep and
release

Reviews

[Darian B.]

Absolutely beautiful, I guess there was no point in my suggestion but I must say that I like this format better than your latest poem. That being said, if you feel better about the rhymes, by all means keep them. The most important person to like our poems is us so whatever you like, your poems are very strong and have a lot of emotions in them. Every line in this poem is purposeful and leads to a powerful piece. I very much like this poem!

[Lovecraft]

Another vivid poem about sleepless and restless nights. I hate that I can truly relate to this theme of Insomnia. Often it can become maddeningly frustrating...

So I have much sympathy for you, as I share that plight with you.

The third stanza is magnificent in its portrayal of trying your damnedest to fall asleep and almost willing to pray to God himself to let you sleep, especially after being awake for three or four days.

I know that all too well. I routinely stay awake anywhere from 2-4 days several times a month at least. Sorry for spilling my own woes upon you, but that's how amazingly realistic your Sleep themed poems are, so take it as a compliment, lol.

Another good poem, young lady!

[matrixmark]

Great piece about not getting much sleep.
I love the lines ' The cat slumbers below at my feet
Oblivious to the battle occurring within the sheets' - This sometimes happens to me and it's so true.

Also that Darn clock...going tick..tock - I know that feeling too.

I was a good read but so so true as to why many of us cant get to sleep.

Kudos to you.

Mark.

[mercy party]

Do you have to sleep with the television on? your poem made me remember when i had to. Also there is something fast about your writing. i dont know, call me crazy. Nicely done!

[Warrior]

I like how you describe the sounds, it makes it more realistic.