RAIN DAMAGE

06 07 13

...O true apothecary!
Thy drugs are quick...

Already I can feel
my famished curiosity
shrivel in sync with
my nervous system
in the chilly mist of mercy
human-style

Final thoughts fruitless
as my digestive tract

No clergyman of kin
around to crawl to me
and tickle this
velocious stupor
with the solace of a
shrunken heaven for the
most wanted
and
least
relevant

Author's Note

Opening citation: Romeo's last words...nuff said, or should I say, nuff said here...

Reviews

[Paige H]

I really enjoyed this poem. Ever since I was quite young, I have been basically in love with Shakespeare, so I quite liked the inclusion of that piece in the beginning. That segment flowed well with the rest of the piece and gave a nice continuum of thought on the topic. I particularly liked the line "with the solace of a shrunken heaven." For some reason this line really spoke to me. Great work on this poem!

[kublakhan27]

It's always cool to hear from another Shakespeare buff, and even though the idea for the opening quote didn't occur to me till I actually finished the piece, it has become the defining element for me, so I now believe it was swimming in my subconscious all the while as I was writing it haha Thank you my friend :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Slingshot curios rat-a-tat against wizened, callous sentiment. Ladles full of ipecac protect and coat this curious mordant phrasing. It slithers across the page with the grace of a centipede intent upon karmic fluid that can sate its ravenous pursuit. Who will bless the needy, suspended in drunken contemplation within this zone of comprehensive desolation? I wonder and marvel at the magnificence of your silken lamentations, oh Khan!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Some people have a gift of the gab, I have a gift of the sigh...thanks my friend :)

[Peter H]

VERY intriguing finely crafted :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Peter :)

[Androglossia]

True. Vehemence and stoicism can cause damage. But emotions are like blanket, my friend. Without them, you are cold.

[kublakhan27]

I hear that my dear...if emotion is warmth, I think I'm coming down with a fever...

[Androglossia]

lol at least it's something new!

[kublakhan27]

lol True story ;)

[Felicity's Eve]

Very insightful! And nicely written :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Nora :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Angi]

This may be a kind of mercy, but not the one that will reveal the relevancy. Sad, Kublakhan! Angi~

[kublakhan27]

Relevance is becoming an increasingly abstract concept to me with each passing day...thank you Angi :)

[Angi]

I hate to hear you talk that way, man. I am sending you good vibes right now. Write it out. That may help. Angi~

[kublakhan27]

Thank you for the good vibes my friend, I do appreciate that :)