BETRAYAL ON THE ROCKS

09 10 13

This orgasm

begging to get out

of my system

will have to wait

till the final mouthful

of salvation

is eliminated from

the dream of

the final glass

that forebodes

emptiness

What comes first?

An imagination

drowned in loneliness

or a drunken

sleep of resignation

coated in the salivation

of a drool

limp and damp

clamming up a cheek

immune to comfort

sleeping off

the slavery of realism?

Reviews

[quixotic_rose]

HOLY, THIS IS WHAT LOVE IS. Seriously, this was just so....idk I feel like it just grabbed ahold of me and would not let go. I read this four times over. The imagery I got from this was amazing, the emotions so provocative and astonishing. The whole meaning I got out of this was just...Complete awe right now. I read it and found two different perspectives in it, I love each one I had. The beginning really dragged me in haha "This orgasm" wow packed that punch! 5 stars, thumbs up, pat on the back, bravo my friend!

[kublakhan27]

Wow, you have left me humbled and speechless my friend. There are no words to express how tickled I am that you enjoyed it so much. Reading your review, I had a big smile on my face :) Thank you so much, your words mean more than you know :)

[quixotic_rose]

I'm glad my words at least give a positive impact. When I really enjoy a writing I try to let the writer know just how much by spazzing out in the most gracious of ways haha. ANYTIME

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well your spazzing has made my day ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

sleeping off
the slavery of realism...

Damn. We go along with this delusion that we are in control. Even our precious creativity, our very ego, must bow to the limits of reality. Power in your words, K.

[kublakhan27]

Very true...and that delusion becomes a burden after a while...thank you Rita, for reading and understanding :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"the slavery of realism" wow..to that line..i bow!
this is so frustrating...all that we want to do, all that we want to get out of our system...achieve..

but the dream is stifled to resignation..the orgasm will only get close...but it will never happen.

wonderful write. that hopelessness, that resignation...the dream that commits suicide. or is choked to death by circumstance beyond our control.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, you've really tapped into the spirit of this piece, and your kind words always mean the world.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You write with an intensity that comes full force, my dear Steve!

I felt the demise, the drowning of your loneliness... you captured the isolation and drew me in...
to peer into the darkest corners of your mind.

"the slavery of realism"~ Such a powerful ending!

Amazing write!~xoxo~

[kublakhan27]

Thank you so much my sweet friend :) You really tapped into the essence of this piece...loneliness is a very good swimmer, and my muse is either very understanding or sick of the melancholy state I'm carrying around and holding a mirror up to me and my poetic tendencies haha You have a way of nudging yourself in between my lines and finding the meanings that hide behind those poetic devices...thank you Robbie :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's always a pleasure to read your work of art.. and I get your melancholy emotions... it's powerful, my sweet!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

(((hugs))) :)