LAZY STREET CORNER'S IDEOLOGY (A FREIDA / KUBLA COLLAB)

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in the dead of winter's arctic chill

and the heat of sultry summer's night

you render me poetically impotent

flipped the switch of immortality's light

enduring blight patterns in perpetual spin

concepts on overload's redemption

deliverance from evil salvation's undertow

rescued by a vessel with unattainable oars

drowning in drifts of your sin's pollution

bitter humps in my breath keeping salvation awake

albeit in the pallid placenta

of this incessantly emotive coma

my despondency's senseless battery

I was pushed with nostrils unprepared

into currentless Styx

your aim made stiff and precise

ratifying the erect assurances of

your weather-laced conceptual divining rod

wicked abomination's extortion spat at public view

aborted on laissez-faire's lazy street corner's ideology

inculcating fear trumping Athenian philosophizer's hype

atheists ran amuck ringing toll bells of indiscretion

born again of aversion's ruptured inclinations

knelt in holy water's puddle of indistinguishable rapture

torrid lucidity's revulsion erupted in convulsions

waving uncle's white flag in dubious surrendered conquests

the season of the muse sleeps

in the numbers on a calender

slumbers conquered, heartbeat imbues

a virus on progressive impressions

sealing it in the faux closure of December's page

lathered books accrue in time's standing army

quotes pulled from their must like taffy here and there

Shakespearean production's detestable actions

genuflecting afore ice sculpture's entry passages

withering on the vine of Heathcliff's offences

plunged into icy atmosphere's unplugged desires

defenses frozen in a time before poetry rhymed

I forgive you for your sins of dropping those names

a bulb just signed away its tungsten heart

that was when it felt like the living started

I'll even in willingness send you off with a clock

You are not forgiven for the dropping of my virtues

in the river of the dead like a sacrifice

to fair weather while I grovel in Stygian propaganda

yearning secretly for the de-horizoning delta

offering a path less swam to make all the difference

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Too many lines to mull over here, but I am super fond of the "pushed with nostrils unprepared into currentless Styx" -- for me it's about forgiving some things, but not the ones that left you to drown ...
P.S. the author's note is just a blank black box for me, but because of all the water references, I did think of Theory of A Deadman's latest DROWN, when I read it.

[Frieda P]

Benji's brilliance at work in that line...thanks so much KL...good song, why didn't I think of that?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rf_vTIa66ec

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed our collab, thank you K...very fitting song...

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, I love this poem. Nicely written, my friend. :)

[TL Boehm]

the mix of myth and eros and steel in this thing is so addictive. A stellar piece from the both of you

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much TL, glad you enjoyed our collab :)

[Rita L. Sev]

I have read this a few times, on two different days. Intricate weaving of your styles and rich vocabulary; you are keeping your readers on their proverbial toes with this piece, Frieda and Steve!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thanks so much Rita, we were actually a bit worried about this one, having walked the abstract edge on previous pieces, and we thought we might have taken it a bit far on this one...I'm glad to hear that there was still enough poetic devices in there to maintain an element of mystery...so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Rita L. Sev]

After writing this review, I read some of the others - so relieved that I am not the only one intimidated by your combined genius!

[kublakhan27]

Haha No need to be intimidated my friend...we just have this way of painting ourselves into a corner then daring ourselves to escape...I don't know if we start with that intention but our chemistry just seems to steer us in that direction...I'll mention your review to her though, maybe she'll have something to contribute...at the very least I know she'll appreciate your kind words ;)

[Frieda P]

They let us have a brief stay from the asylum just to write these Rita, we're not genius, we're crazy. ;) Ha...thanks muchly!

[kublakhan27]

Hahaha Yes I prefer that assessment to mine ;)

[Frieda P]

Same difference Benji ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

Ah... well, that does explain it! ;p

[Frieda P]

LOL ;P

[kublakhan27]

Hahaha Mrs.R knows how to set the record straight, not to mention me ;P

[KWP]

There sure is a heck of a lot to take in there ... Made all the more of a task because we are dealing with the two of you ...

If I am to be totally honest I would have to say that it hurts my wee little brain even thinking about the musings here ... Then again I am a simple gal as we all know that needs a clear easy message ...

Can someone please send me the crib notes on this poem please so I can study it more deeply ;-)

Well done you two xx

[Frieda P]

Oh geez Betty, put yer big girls britches on, you can do it. :) Thanks so much...xo

[KWP]

they shrunk in the dryer .....

[KWP]

Are you having some kind of joke with me Sexy Frieda .... Have you seen how long that poem is above ... What was it you are always telling me about my mouth that just do shut up :-D x

[Frieda P]

Haha you know I love to tease you! MWAH! xo :D

[KWP]

worn out from that epic .... need a sleep xx

[Frieda P]

Is it sleepy time in Oz?

[KWP]

it is for me after all those words ... had to go and look up the meanings for a few of them .... who says WC is not just an english lesson in disguise ??? ... LOVE YOU XXX

[Frieda P]

Ha you crack me up Betty...I love when I learn a new word here, stop yer whinging...love ya xoxox

[KWP]

hehehehe you make me laugh .... ok i put my fresh out of the dryer big britches on and guess where I am feeling the warmth ... ahahahahaha ;)

[Frieda P]

LOL....you're bad lady. ;)

[KWP]

oh but oh so warm ....... in all the right places .....

[kublakhan27]

Thank you :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"in the dead of winter's arctic chill

and the heat of sultry summer's night

you render me poetically impotent

flipped the switch of immortality's light

enduring blight patterns in perpetual spin

concepts on overload's redemption"~ Wow!...I enjoyed the Paradoxical weaving of two amazing writers!...You two are explosive indeed!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

I have Freida to thank for those lines my friends...I don't like to give away too much of our collaborative formula, but she opens every one we write and usually the sets the tone...I'll get the evil eye for saying this, but she makes me sound better than I am with her mere presence ;) We like paradoxes as well haha So glad you enjoyed it Robbie...I'm sure Mrs.R will offer her thanks soon as well :) xoxo

[Sophy Freebirds]

Two dynamites combined to give this excellent piece of work which will be unrivalled in this sight for times to come.I was dragged more and more into this teasing tornado.Uncovering the exquiste metaphors and delectable phrases.. the last line stole my heart- offering a path less swam to make all difference. Reminded me of poem road not taken by robert frost...... i was drowning in this poem but it was a delightful one as i was rescued by unattainable oars.. ha ;)

~Sophy

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words Sophy, they are truly humbling...the end actually was a reference to the Frost poem, you are the first to mention that ;) The unattainable oars came courtesy of Freida, she often provides the concepts for our works and I just try to mix and match with my bits, and make connections...so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

You both deserve to be praised.And Yea.. Freida is amazing in what she does.. :) it was a pleasure reading your collab.. keep writing

[kublakhan27]

She certainly is, she's a muse :) I'm sure we'll be back, we usually need a wind-down period after doing one cuz we're drained haha

[Jack Wolfe]

This was definitely a complex entanglement of the minds, layers of descriptions and metaphors stacked one on top each other, it became almost overwhelming, almost like drowning, which considering all the references to water, and the river Styx seem appropriate. A nice collaboration by you two, thanks for the entertaining read.

[kublakhan27]

I think we enjoy overwhelming, and packing as many metaphors into a concept as possible...it just seems to come naturally with us haha Thank you Jack, I'm glad that we could entertain you with our words.

[Frieda P]

I don't mind drowning, as long as it's in a poem, thanks Jack...

[AprilRN1210]

you sure pulled my mind, body and heart strings like taffy with this one.. It was like two souls dancing around the questions and taunting effects of the other one.. Such exquisite word play here that stimulates my mind, yet delicious images that stimulate... well... yea.... It is dark, and twisted, yet heated and tempting.. I sure don't think the muse was asleep on this one.. good job you two!!

[kublakhan27]

You've brought a smile to your face with your review my friend, and I didn't think I had one of those in me today...I'm thrilled that our work has resonated so deeply with you, and I know Freida will be as well, especially when she sees the dance part ;) Thanks so much April :)

[AprilRN1210]

well, I am glad I brought a smile to your face!... should do it more often!!... where's my girl hiding?.... hey ma'am you dancing on the ceiling somewhere?... You are more than welcome.. I enjoy ya'll's collabs... sure make me think...:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha She probably hasn't noticed yet...I'll let her know :)

[AprilRN1210]

sounds greaaaat!! :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I just came down off the ceiling....you drag me back me back up...off I go! Thanks April! :)

[B-poet]

This a rich & complex ideology you two have put together here. The best part about it is the layering each descriptive line adds towards the collaborative vision brought to life by two talented poets. Great work. A rare & unique read. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much B, we try to make them as seamless as possible...so glad you enjoyed our collab :)