From outside to Inside

its poem for today's generation

Taka tuku tika tuku tatata

Chaka chuku chika chuku chahaha

It's just an sound but no meaning

who cares about that just enjoy that thing

On the way to the office if you sees an accident

take a pic but don't help him

upload in fb and see the comment

what peoples give on him

Mouse in the house run run run

oh my God you are in trouble

Take your smartphone

search rat poison in Google

Don't let kids to play outside

there skin may get burnt

give them to play video games

keep on press the buttons that don't get hurt

Don't care about the guy

who lives next to your door

make new friends through

FB,Whatsapp,twitter

lala lulu lala lulu lalala

kaka kuku kaka kuku kakaka

there is a sound but no meaning

life has updated from outside to inside

we should know what we are doing. 

Reviews

[Vishuddha]

Chaka chuku chika chuku chahaha fills the head and leaves no room for thoughts. But, there are many people who do not want to think. It is easier to fill the head with nothing.

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for the review....

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Although there are some grammatical mistakes BUT I wud say... this one...spreads a nice message!! Well dne!!

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you for spending your precious time in reading my poems I am glad u have liked it....

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

You're welcome sir!!

[Confuser]

Enlightening. You are so right, at least I don't use smartphone and barely check facebook monthly and twitter Oh my goodness. Thank you, hope people get it. Society is changing is crazy ways.

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for the review......

[Confuser]

you are welcome. enjoyed it. Thank you.

[Emily]

'On the way to the office if you sees an accident
take a pic but don't help him'

Something about this line pulls me in!

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you for the review.........

[Haley Wilson]

This is probably one of the most unique poems I've seen on here. It's a fun but truthful read!

[Kuldeep desai]

All poems are unique here and all poems are like child to it's author...........if you are feeling my poem as unique that is your greatness thank you for that......ofcourse ur's comment was also unique...

[Prabha Salimath]

The changing time making human machine, yes people don't know how to use technology and time, as I feel technology means to expand your knowledge, time is precious and don't waste it, but make time for all after having schedule.. Poem reveals the disasterous truth of present time.

[Kuldeep desai]

yeah you are right but the ugly fact is every thing has its own pros and cons............we can't get rid of them......

[SonOfaSailor]

I love it! The 'connected' disconnect
"There is a sound but no meaning" makes me think of how meaningless words in text can be to a person looking for fulfilling human connection.

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for the review.........i am glad you have liked it.......

[Coyote Poetry]

Real life feel in the words.
"Don't care about the guy
who lives next to your door
make new friends through
FB,Whatsapp,twitter"
New age had create fear, we do not know our neighbors and prefer internet friends over real people. It is a different world. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kuldeep desai]

thanks man......

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Tasfia Islam]

I loved it....It deals with a truth of the present world... keep it up :)

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you........i am glad you liked it....

[M.A.Rathore]

The matter is not how you write your thoughts in what manner you treat your subject matter but it relays on what message you want to deliver. It may differ from person to person with their likings or dislikings with particular inclinations.When you try to explain your message in a poetic piece you can use sounds as the figure of speech named onometopoia which allows you apply all those senseless words to produce sound effect. Poetry is related with heart. It is not a stuff or technical instrument that works with electonic opration. It's our heart where emotions grow.
As for as your poem is concerned it is a very fine piece letting us know what our younger generation does on relations these day. They do not try to stenghten their moral character rather than they are busy in senseless sites wasting their times. People these day have less habitual of making any good relation with their neighbours. Thus they have losing all their personal attatchment with society.
Thanks for sharing this nice piece.
The standard of poetic nature is different from mam to man. Do not worry what do people say about your poetry.
Keep sebding your amazing poetry. I wouls love to read them all.
Thanks do read some of mine to get pleasure of writing....lol!
Have nice time!

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you Mr.Rathore .......And your review really makes to improve about writing its like you give soul to the body by your review....thank you....

[M.A.Rathore]

You're always welcome my dear friend..