Don't Keep Me Waiting

A short love story..

Please don't keep me waiting,

at the yellow slide

where we always have our play-dates.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

in the cafeteria

where we sit and eat lunch together.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

at the study hall

where we always get yelled at by the teacher.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

on our first date

where we are going to see the move, again.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

on prom night

where we will dance as much as we want to.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

in the rain,

where we are headed on a road trip.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

at our graduation

where we will become closer to one.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

in my beautiful white dress

where we will finally say our corny vows.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

at the hostpital

where we will finally have a new member in the family.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

on the hill side

where we finally become grandparents.

 

Please don't keep me waiting,

in the bright light

where we will finally be together again.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the flow of thoughts and hope in the poem. Life is waiting. All of us hope for good endings and timely people. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lover Of Words]

Your sweetness to your words have such depths

[Sami Khalil]

Very sweet indeed...Thank you for sharing...:).......................

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

This is sooo cute and sweet. I love the anaphora here and how the story unfolds. This reminds me of my poem "Fast Forward". :)

[emone emmanuel]

I won't keep you waiting while I ought to be telling you that you are a genius• Nice poem by a great poet

[Blake]

I think the pacing of this develops perfectly as it progresses to the end. There're no sudden jumps, it all flows really well. My only qualm is that the length feels ever so slightly insufficient, but that may just be me.

[Phillitup]

This concept of the "please don't keep me waiting", it drummed in my ear as the good song you put on repeat and don't grow angry at. I liked this a lot. Each stanza eloquently described a time in a life of love. Perfectly written.
-Dell

[Missy Lorraine]

So sweet and pure. FYI guys, this is like every little girl's fantasy. Usually poems like this are too repetitive, but you executed it quite beautifully. It has the essence of childhood and innocence. absolutely love it!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I think this is very sweet, encompassing a love that begins in childhood and ends on the back of eternity to live yet again. Your talent is quite impressive for one so young, and I can only imagine where you will be ten or twenty years from now. As writing is a progression, I see great things for you in the future.