Dreams and Schemes

A mind wander

In dreams falling cascades
I wonder
Even ponder
About your voice
Hidden inside this water

Gentle meanings lost
In streams rivulets
Caresses with each finger
Leaves nothing but surrender
Will you i wonder submit to my eternal thunder?

Reviews

[Inkcognito]

Sensational!... who'd be able to resist the temptation of eternal thunder, I wonder?!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

stunning elemental presence~

[Wondering Mind]

Beautiful metaphor and imagery.. No wonder the mind wandered.

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. oh, epic writing ... sheer genius ... "eternal thunder" is such a powerful expression ... and this submission ... is so absolute and defining ... i so hope your mind feels like a wander often ... this is a rare treat for the soul ... the words flow like a stream ... one can almost hear the water ... spectacular writing ...

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ohh..the intrigue..loved the minds wonder! Delightful

[MuSe Ampoule]

This flows very well, like the rivulets. I love the water imagery in relation to exploring feelings.
"Caresses with each finger
Leaves nothing but surrender" this stood out! Great job.