Present Gift

the future is scheduled

the past has been cancelled

the present's a dream

it's why we call it a gift

coming apart at the seams

as we cease to exist

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

The art of cancelling the past is a great feat if it can be achieved not sure why anyone would want to completely for it is the stuff of our comprise. Loads of people try to schedule the future but no itinerary can sway the flow of tide. However the present of presence is an ever unraveling weave indeed... the threads of which reach far back beyond anyone's reach and the pattern of the makings of existence is an ever changing interpretation of the viewers eye. Not sure of the negative reaction of the previous review because this short poem is very thought provoking regardless of the eyes view and i do enjoy the image of the coming apart at the seems.....

[Davidgeo]

That's a pretty insightful review, more so than the poem itself probably. Thanks Bunny. In regards to the d********g review, it's a long and stupid story... and you're better off ignoring it completely. That guy is a f*****g moronic, bigoted, hypocritical, sexist, racist, dumb a*s... you're better off pretending him and his rage don't exist here.

[Robert Trakofler]

no i disagree that poem is what made me think that stream i rate it very high

[Gerald Parker]

"Not sure of the negative reaction of the previous review" - my words were NOT a negative review!

[Davidgeo]

Relax Gerald... he wasn't talking about your review. Everyone of us would be better off not to elaborate on that bullshit any further. It's not productive any way you slice it.

[Robert Trakofler]

referring to John Alexander McFadyen review yours came afterwards:)

[Robert Trakofler]

at least on my screen? meant no offense Mr. Parker

[Gerald Parker]

OK, I'm relaxing. No problem.

[goldenscar__]

The present is only better because of the past's lessons. Future is yet to be discovered and then scheduled. Nice poem, David.

[Davidgeo]

"Good judgement comes from experience. And experience, comes from poor judgement." Rita Brown

[Chris Shaw]

The present IS a gift, but not many people seem to be able to truly appreciate that and live there. We plan for the future, and often look forward to future events, more so when we are younger in years. Our past is gone, I don't look on it as cancelled, because I can still recall it and do so. Brevity in your lines and yet they say much.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Chris, you always leave aptly quality reviews. I never don't appreciate that. "Brevity is the soul of wit" - billy shakes

[ViaLex]

Short and simple poems are my favorite. You gave us the roots, and we're set to explore.

[Davidgeo]

I think poetry should be personal for both the reader and the writer. The trick is to find a way to make sense while adhering to that thought. I only succeed at it about half the time and usually don't even know it when I do. Thanks for your review... it gives me legit. confidence.

[ViaLex]

It's likely you succeed more than you realize. And you're welcome. It's nice to have outside confirmation.

[Davidgeo]

You're very generous with your praise. Don't forget to be critical sometimes... it's no less important.

[ViaLex]

I actually couldn't agree with you more. I'm sure I'll get there ;)

[Davidgeo]

Keep reading me... I'll give you all kinds of reasons to be critical. You caught me at a good time in this moment.

[ViaLex]

Challenge accepted.

[Davidgeo]

I think I have around 1100 or so poems here and I'm only infrequently good so you might get a little bored. But by all means, go to town... I can't really get any better at this on my own.

[Davidgeo]

. . . I'll return the favor I promise.

[ViaLex]

I understand. That's exactly why I'm here. I'll dedicate some time soon, to perusing. I wish I could give you some "short sweet" stuff, but I tend to be far more long winded. No pressure.

[Davidgeo]

Don't fret... take your time and do your thing on your own terms. Any other way would be bullshit anyway. Which unfortunately is the norm here.

[ViaLex]

Yeah, I'd like it to not be a stress. I've seen little of the world here, but I'm sure you know what you're talking about.

[Davidgeo]

Mind and Body Strong Grasshopper.

[Ana B.]

This induced a whole thinking process. I think you just inspired me into writing a poem, lol.

[Davidgeo]

That's high praise... thanks. Let me know when you post it, I'm curious to see what you come up with.

[Ana B.]

will do ;) take good care meanwhile.

[Ana B.]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/MockingThoughts/2096297/

[gram linski]

Entropy encroaching, dude we are all rust and dust

[Davidgeo]

Indeed we do. Even Tom Brady.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for proving my previous points John A McDouchebag… you're an oblivious jack a*s. by the way... how are you not a hypocrite for doing s**t like this? You're doing the same things you vilify others for but the difference is... at least I'm honest with myself. You're too much of a narcissistic dipshit to truly be introspective and it makes me chuckle every time you pretend to have the high ground by leaving "hate poems" and spreading fucked up bullshit about people you disagree with. You're basically like a teenage girl in a flame war... as an older adult, you should be embarrassed of yourself. But like I said before, it does make me chuckle to see how self un-aware you are so by all means, continue being a f*****g moron. And I am aware of your darker secrets... that you're a racist perverted bigot. Two different women here have confirmed it - ya f****n' scumbag. You and Anto (or tony Jordan or whatever he's calling himself here now) are basically the same people.... emotionally selfish, manipulative, morally disingenuous and narcissistic to the core. (you're not a good writer by the way... I'm only slightly above average and you pale next to me. That means you suck, objectively.)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Butt Plugged
A Poem by John Alexander McFadyen
" Troll "
Warning
This Poem is rated Mature and may contain material unsuitable for readers under 18.
Hey you aren't no seagull,

so stop shitting

on me David.

You have no right

to be so abusive;

so destructive

for no reason.

You do it to so many;

Why?

Do you get off on it?

Is it what gives you purpose

after your service?

After seeing death

and destruction

in foreign lands?

Or is it because of your guilt

for not being in harms way

and selling your butt

for quick satisfaction?

[Gerald Parker]

Nice, short and pithy. The present we never receive.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks Gerald. You're a good sport.