Learned to Fly

How did it come out? I felt inspired

We all feel sad

In our lives 

Yet we think 

That we don't have a reason 

To fight  

We all are afraid

but fear has to go away at some point

We've tried to fly

But we've fell down 

Earth's gravity brought us to reality's crown

Hey

But that doesn't mean

That we were going to stop trying

So we've built and built bridges

To connect our lands and people

with dreams that come in many little things 

 one day

Those things

 became giants

That roam around our world

with such beauty in our world 

We all learn to fly at some point

We are a human race

Full of dreams and realities

WE all have a different story

A different life

No matter who you are 

We've all been through some pretty rough stuff

But we're here 

Alive

Breathing and Alive

Some fight back

Some give up 

We're full of surprises

We fight againts the wind 

That pushes us backwards 

But Like the birds and airplanes

Some day

We......

               Learn........

                                 to.............

                                                     Fly

Reviews

[Tom McRoberts]

Wonderful use of unconventional layout, Lizardo--this is certainly a poem that belongs to the wind! You might not need the ellipses at the end. Because of your spacing the words are read with pauses anyway, the form punctuates itself. Great write, man!

[Lizardo]

Actually the pauses where meant to be lo Thanks Tom :) Im glad you liked this one and thank you for taking your time and reading this, thanks :)

[Willard Wells]

Very nice and I like it all the way through. I will mention one place I would like a change, but understand your poem is your poem and if you receive suggestions, only go with them it they feel right.

We've tried to fly
But we've fell down

We've tried to fly
But we fell down

It would change your word count per line if that is you issue, but have fun that's what it's about.
Keep up the good work. Thank you for sharing a wonderful view of achievement and goals in life.

[Lizardo]

Thanks Willard :) I really appreciete your time to read this, because there are a lot of better works out there
Ill see what I can do, but really, thanks a lot

[Willard Wells]

I read a fair amount of writing and I comment when I can. Some writing is so out there or unreadable that I don't comment. I think your words and message were good. Your structure and format that some have mentioned could be different and the poem still would work. But it's yours to make the change only if you feel it adds to your work.

[Lizardo]

I was thinking about the format, but I dont get it, like the format of the words or the layout of the poem?

[Willard Wells]

I work on words with little creative presentation, but that's my brain. If I am looking to please others beyond myself I look at what format is most often used for a successful poem and go from there. If you are looking for part of your art to be the format and words, then you do what you did. With what you have there is extra work involved beyond the words in reading it. You have lots of think about and I may not be helping. LOL

[Lizardo]

LOL dont worry it is :) thank you a lot, ill see what I can do

[Emily]

A beautiful way to get your topic across. Great job!

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Emily! I really appreciete it your time to read this, thanks :)

[Perkele.7885]

Lizardo, it was a great poem without the funky format! The picture fit the poem well. I think that the format is very distracting and destructive to a beautiful effort. But, I am just 1 small voice among many!

[Lizardo]

Thanks perkele! I'm wondering, like the usage of the verses put in aleatory ways? Or the format of the letters ?

[Daisy]

It's really awesome...... but the fact is we never learn to fly, it's our thoughts and views which become so broad so they look like flying making us lighter....
Very great job lizardo it's really a wonderful poem

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much daisy :) I really appreciate it

[Ishita Dixit]

A very inspiring poem Lizardo.
We all have our ups and downs.
The trick is to never look back and soldier on.
Nicely done my friend!

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Ishita! I reallly appreciete it :)

[andrew mitchell]

A great uplifting write my friend

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much andrew, I really appreciete it :)

[Chris]

Very dynamic piece. Excellent subject matter too, nicely delivered.

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Chris! I really appreciete taking your time and reading this :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am not sure if fear ever really goes away...but i think we learn how to cope with it...go after what we want anyway...maturity happens when don't let fear rule us..and then life can be full of surprises...all we have to do is let it happen...

[Lizardo]

It goes and returns Jacob, it goes and returns, and when it goes, it's better to enjoy those moments and be prepared for when it returns.
Thanks for the review Jacob, I really appreciete it!

[Confuser]

Lizardo: It sparkles and shines: uplifting and encouraging, and so very true. Some people give up, grieve and forget to believe and one day, they make the choice to fight or die...your observations about human nature is inciteful. I like the metaphors too, the image of a bird in flight, the freedom above all the world's problems without worries. Great writing, and the layout is attractive and gives the reader time to pause: I really enjoyed it. Like Tom Petty said, I learning to Fly...but I 'aight got winds, coming down is the hardest thing. Great work Lizardo. thank you so very much. Dale

[Lizardo]

Thank you so much Dale! I really appreciete your visit here :)
I really got inspire today, when I was going in my car and saw the different people passing in between my eyes, then a good song, and there you have it, a product of my mind haha.
Thanks Dale, your visits are always welcoming :)

[Confuser]

My pleasure: you know I love your poems! WoW!!!!