Fullmoon, the Game of the Guardians.

The night comes with a lurid full moon

The wolf's howling makes the villager swoon

Nocturnal wings flying sporadically in the cataleptic skies

The sounds of chaos is imminent from the distance miles

The villagers frighten for the arrival of malevolent shadow

He brought nightmares, even killed the tamed breath in the meadow

The Monster forays once again, breaks the wall and captures a woman.

The lady screams loudly, seems there is no way to run.

The Beast severely deep-rooted his fangs into her neck

The woman lost her breath in  a disastrous peak.

The blood strewn all over the base, slowly scattered everywhere.

Causing a horrific death in this gloomy  wicked sphere

The Beast ended his victim by removing her heart with his monstrous paw

Then dropped his prey, he roars, reverberate fears,  reaching the devilish crow.

Chaos is his nature, strikes death in every place.

He fulfills his destiny and follows his kindred wishes

Suddenly the beast detects the arrival of his enemies’ wagon

The guardians open the door, flying sword and silver bullets heading to one direction.

The Monster is quick to leap upward, evades the silver death wisely

He breaks the asbestos roof by his claws, jumping from place to place till he’s free

He fades into the dark realm, wildly victorious and still reign in the dark.

The Guardians failed to kill the Monster; it makes the future looks stark

But still, this is not the end of the game, until the next full moon.

Before the dawn comes, the Guardians will kill this hideous black hairy demon.

The Next Full Moon

Reviews

[Imara]

"The wolf howls echoes ..." I think you mean the wolfs howls echoes. It sounds a little awkward though.
"malevolence shadows..." Malevolent.
There are some more errors like these, I would suggest reading it aloud to yourself in order to catch them.
Good concept but your wording makes it a little strange. I think this would do better as a short story rather than a poem. Great imagery though and a great concept. Overall good job :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi thanks Imara I really appreciate your honest review :) I will do you suggestions :) thanks.

[Keith LaFountaine]

You have an awesome concept here. It's hindered somewhat by the GUM errors, but there's nothing that really makes it hard to understand. You have a magnificent setting and atmosphere. I'd suggest to explore this style some more, explore the atmosphere and the emotions you've injected into the story already, and see what comes out of it!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Keith I will re-read it again to check the gum of my writings, I appreciate your honest review, yes I will try to release the next fullmoon as follow-up for this.

[Sami Khalil]

"Enormous nocturnal wings flying sporadically in the cataleptic skies

The sounds of chaos is imminent from the distance miles

The village people feared the coming of the malevolence shadows"
You do a great job in your metaphors and horror elements . You are talented dear poet...:)

[Mike Emil]

guardians? guardians of what? leave the fricking werewolves be already they're just having fun d****t!!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

The next fullmoon, the wolf will freakout with his vampire girlfriend. :) lol

[Mike Emil]

it's good to get one's freak on
give 'em some saki and plum wine for that

[Mike Emil]

feeling lupy now? manachevitz wil take care of that

[Riley Bray]

I have to say, I agree with Trigorin on the point that simpler is better for you. Aside from that, there are a few spelling/grammar errors in here as well as some strange word choices:

The howling wolf echoes from the distance, footsteps, screeches and uproars. ----This goes from third person to some odd version of a first person, or so it sounds. I think it would be best to change this one up.

The Monster forays again the purview, breaks the wall and feat a fair maiden. ----The definition of foray is basically a sudden attack, and the definition of purview is a range of experience, so it seems you're saying, "The Monster suddenly attacks experience," which doesn't really make sense. The second part of that, where you say, "breaks the wall and feat a fair maiden," is also off, since the definition of feat is an achievement acquired by great courage, as well as the fact that again the point of view is odd.

The lady screams for her life, the Beast entrenched his fangs to her limb---- this also sounds weird because point of view is screwed up here to.

Gust of blood strewn the base, slowly her blood runs dry.----gusts? Change strewn around the base to strewn around the base, as slowly her blood runs dry.

He settled taking out the heart, with his monstrous paw.-----he settled with

Chaos is what he intent, as the guardians open the door.---strange points of view again, also intent to intended

Silver flying sword and silver bullets heading to one direction.-----worded strangely

The Monster jumps rising, evading the silver death.-------also worded strangely

Until he fades into the dark realm, the Beast still out there.-----point of view is strange again.

:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Riley, I will re-write this piece, I appreciate your honest review thanks a lot.

[Riley Bray]

You're very welcome. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:)

[Trigorin]

I think simpler is better with your writing. Your concept is good but some of your word choice is very, very odd in places and I think that clouds your meaning somewhat. If it was intentional, I think there might be a little more merit to it, but if you didn't have the oddness of the words in mind when you wrote them, I think you ought to go back over this and rethink things in simpler, more effective terms.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Tri, I will try to re-write it, thanks again for your honest review.

[Rita L. Sev]

A dark tale told here, and very well. Vivid and frightful - Not a bedtime story, for sure! Love it!

[Stella Armour]

now i am waiting for the next chapter when the moon becomes full again. A fantastic picture you have chosen which sets the scene so well.. great story telling Marc..

[TL Boehm]

Wow. Brutal! and scary. Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks TL :)