Children of War

 

I want to end this pain, I embraced my ancestor’s belief

Believing this room will protect and helps us overcome our grief

I started hearing louder explosions, and when it is over

Stillness breaks my realm and it booms down under

We experienced too much bedlam and it is completely insane

This war will achieve nothing, it will bring more pain

We have no food to eat, the water comes late

We end up begging for bread and a trifling meat

We chill, sleeping with fears in the cold winter nights

We wake up seeing blood wasted in this continuing war

We ask for help as our souls can’t breathe

The plane keeps flying, seems it is chasing our heartbeats

The bags were dropped down from the plane and poisoned the thin air

Our future looks bleak and everyone disappears

Did you hear our cries? Could you stop all these lies?

We need you, free us from the pain of this despise

See our tears, our wounds, and our gloomy future

Rescue us,spare us from this deathly core

We need you, we need your mighty claws, my valiant eagles

Oh hear our cries, in our land of compromise.

 

Author's Note

Looking those children of war who suffered most in Syria, really breaks my heart. I wish this war will over and they can re-create their precious lives in the future.

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

This is very sad, but well written. My only criticism for this piece is that sometimes you put the singular of something where it should be plural, for example you said, "The plane keeps flying, seem it chasing our heartbeat," and it should be, 'The plane keeps flying, seems its chasing our heartbeat.' Alrighty? Overall great poem Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) thanks Riley, love your honest review.

[Mark]

its should be it's (contraction) :)

[char]

This was really thought provoking and it makes me feel sad knowing that a child's future is hanging in the air of uncertainty. Just a bit of edit: "This war will reach nothing" would sound better as "This war will achieve nothing."

Good stuff, Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Anna L.

[zainul]

Very well written piece.
I pray for the safety of all children in all countries during war and peace.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks zainul

[zainul]

You are always welcome

[Frieda P]

I can't tell you how affecting this is, your words, that little kid broke my heart. I have no words to describe the feeling I'm left with. You do social commentary in your poetry to the hilt Marc, excellent! You own my tears right now...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie :)

[s y e]

Marc, it's really heartbreaking to see those children of war. This is very sad, but well written.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks N.H :)

[Veronica Chandler]

Such a well written piece and the importance of getting the truth out, regardless of how painful it may be to write or to read, it must be done. I am crying for these children and for what our world has come to... when it is after all the children who always pay for what their society and the world at large does, or fails to do. Thank you for being someone not afraid to share what you know.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ronnie this only way I can help them so people around the world will feel their pain. Thanks for the reads always.

[Veronica Chandler]

Rest assured that by your sharing, others will know via me and my own voice; my circle is small but the more voices crying out in the wilderness the more quickly their message will spread.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Glad to know that, thanks Ronnie God bless us all.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Honest, beautiful, sad, and a message that needs to be heard. Kudos to you, my friend.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks GF glad you feel also the sad story of this children in syria.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Marc, it's really heartbreaking to see those children of war...with an uncertain future.

Suggestion: In the second line, the word "overcoming" should not be in gerund form but simply "overcome".

Other than that, an A rating for me. Nice job, Marc. :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Dhaye :) thanks for your honest review, :) love it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I went on many water, gas and food missions for the Army. I learn the woman and children pay for the hate of men. Video and powerful words allowed the reader to feel the pain in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thank you Sir, Thank you for the wonderful thoughts you shared as an army you have the first hand in dealing this situations, I wish this would end. thanks for the reads.

[Magnolia]

powerful and hard hitting Marc. I too share your plea for the war to end...every war.Thank you for this excellent write...Maggie

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Maggie :) I really appreciate to know we're in the same page. Thanks for the reads.

[KAin]

A powerful and mournful poem, Marc.
It carries a lot with its raw essence and feeling.
Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Landred I appreciate your kind words in this piece.