Come on, my friend, embrace life's pain, the heartbreaks, and your death to come. Don't drench yourself in worry's rain and drag through soggy days, so glum. Go slam your dreams upon that drum that rages in your chest so sure as breaths you seize approach their sum and fearless thoughts are all that's pure.
There's comfort in the wallowing and moaning when life's oh so tough, but poison's all you're swallowing and tainted confidences bluff. Don't fantasize that hope's enough. Break free. The action is the cure. Be willful and grind smooth those rough and fearful thoughts. And, bleed them pure.
The world's a blaze and you a spark, a flame, soon smoke and blown out ash; so burn on 'til your skies are dark and strangle time 'til moments flash. And, on that final breeze, you thrash, through whipping winds you won't endure, let all the gods proclaim you brash and fearless and a life so pure.
This is a wonderfully powerful read, and again, it seems that "you saved the best for last". --- "And, on that final breeze, you thrash,
through whipping winds you won't endure,
let all the gods proclaim you brash
and fearless and a life so pure." --- Well done.
I've read this piece five times already, and I seriously can't express to you how envious I grew every time. I think this is the first piece on this site that made me say, "I wish I wrote that."
This poem is so perfect. I especially admired the vocabulary in how expressive it was. The third stanza was my favorite ... the imagery and metaphors throughout were astonishing ... I had to reread it to make sure it was as perfect as I thought it was.
This may be the most poignant rhyming poem I've read on this site. Amazing work.
- William Liston
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thanks, William! :)
This was easy for me. I've had a lot of fear. I'm very careful, never bro.. read moreThanks, William! :)
This was easy for me. I've had a lot of fear. I'm very careful, never broken a bone, yet, someday I will die. It doesn't matter how careful I am. And, I've felt pain. It eases and can be ignored, but I've always worked to avoid it. Why?
I'm a stuttering ape, trying to live, but in control, carefully working to control the environment before it can affect me. I'm cheating myself out of life. Don't envy the person who wrote this. Haha.
Merry Xmas!
Love it! I like the challenge of this piece! I can feel your encouragement as I read!
Favorite part:
There's comfort in the wallowing
And moaning when life is oh so tough,
And poison is all your swallowing..
Truth called out
Then further down:
Break free. The action is the cure.
AWESOME!!
Great piece!
Tabby
LIFE IS A PARTY. DON'T BE A PINATA.
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