Love

In fact,
Love is like a flower,
fell down on the ground.
Among the withered leaves,
It still smelling sweetly.

Reviews

[KatiePie]

Simple but pulsing with beauty and knowledge.
-Cathrine

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know if love would smell so sweetly? I like this poem. A complete story in 19 words. A very good poem.
Coyote

[The Uncommon Muse]

lovely piece, I think maybe re-work some of your verb tenses so that they match better...but I love the emotion this piece evokes.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a great way to describe lost love. It may hurt but the memories are quite beautiful

[Faceless Love]

Great job. It flows. :)

[Jibey]

The grammatical fault is part of the charm... It reads as written by one whose mother tongue is not English... 'fell down on the ground' ... and I love the image of the sweet smell still fragrant amidst the withered leaves...

[R E Tree]

I love this remarkable flow you have created here. You have a great writing talent. I would keep writing because this is beautiful. I'm unsure of what Sara said is right because changing the line from "smelling sweetly" to "'smells sweetly" doesn't do it for me and it stops the beautiful flow of words coming into my head. It makes it sound less peaceful. Overall amazing write

[The Fatal Lover]

Wow. This is wonderful. I loved it. Great job. =)

[Charles]

Hey, this would make a great haiku with just a little work. In doing so (were you to consider the idea), you'd have to pay attention to the tenses of verbs - 'fell' and 'still smelling sweetly' need attention here. Nice though. "-)

[SimplyDisastrous]

Short and sweet. Good job (: