Love

In fact,
Love is like a flower,
fell down on the ground.
Among the withered leaves,
It still smelling sweetly.

Reviews

[cherry]

Thanks for your words, Dinesh :)
I will try!

[Dinesh Sairam]

Splendid thought applied there :) Yeah, but change certain words - If you choose to retain 'fell down on the ground', then change the last line to 'It still smells sweetly (I suggest 'It smells sweetly - The shorter, the better')'. Kudos. Keep writing.

[cherry]

Thanks for correcting my mistake.I will try not to do mistake again!
Thanks for your comment, Sara. :)

[Sara]

this is really sweet, there is a peace about it that almost reminds me of a haiku :) the only thing i might tweak is the tense and a bit of the grammar to give it a bit more flow... for example, 'smelling sweetly' could probably be changed to 'smells sweetly'... but, overall, this is really nice sentiment for a poem :)