Bubonic Beast

We pray to science
for noncompliance
please save us with your new alliance.
On bad behavior, our plastic savior
brings our dinner to the table.
We'll finely dine with rusty wine,
pledge to his health and foundation, embracing.
Water free flowing,
a god ever-knowing
of mankind's quick plight
violent hasting erasing.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

As a rhyme-aholic, I enjoy that you use sophisticated words for your rhymes, not resorting to the more simple options. Responding to David (below), I draw the line when a rhyming riff feels like words thoughtlessly thrown down . . . but here your words are obviously crafted. I'm not too good at following nuanced poetry but I can still recognize a message with imagery & ideas that flow, one into another, as you've done. Plus there are spiritual themes you carry thru with an extended metaphor. Even if I don't fully understand it, I would not think of this as gibberish! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Mitchell J.U.]

When I was much younger it was hard coming to terms with people not experiencing my works as intended. As I have matured that aspect of writing no longer hinders me. Your assessment of this piece brings me joy. These days I just write because it satiates my hungering spirit but good and bad criticism alike are much more appreciated these days as it is not the reason I create. Thank you so much for your time and thoughtful words.
- Mitchell J.U.

[barleygirl]

For me, the hindrance is that I often use a country-hick dialect in my writing which makes it a hard read for people in other countries.

[Lyn Anderson]

Certainly not nonsensical at all. Brings to mind our worship of man over logic, and our strange today in which facts are rejected in order to serve our belief systems - the state of the world today.

[Mitchell J.U.]

Absolutely! I'm glad you took in the picture painted.
Respect,
- Mitchell J.U.

[Davidgeo]

Unfocused to the point of nonsense; kinda like your just rhyming words around a popular theme but not carrying much substance. Or maybe I just didn't get it.

[Mitchell J.U.]

If you don't get it, you don't get it. I'm okay with that. Thanks for your review

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for that response. Not too many people here are open to honesty, especially if it's not of the praising variety. Well done.

[Mitchell J.U.]

Haha. I have more trouble taking good than bad. Thanks again bro.

[Franklin]

Real biblical in almost a sarcastic tone. Keep doing what you do!

[Star-Runner]

Yes! very well put, You know you are an amazing writer I like what you have to say, It's wonderful.

[Mitchell J.U.]

Thank you so much for your review. I would beg to argue that I am at best just a good writer but I will take the compliment. I am just glad that people can enjoy the things I share!