Ultimate Desire

Spread feelings presented here with observing different scenarios.

Time is the key for decision making that is golden rule
For minimizing risk factor use as mitigation tool
Success follows your ways that is sure
With the exception of death all pain has cure
Always greeting with blessings like an open door
Remember in this mortal world nothing can be stay more
If you are feeling friendless and everything seems to be lost
You have option Just only to call GOD

Reviews

[luviva]

AMEN!!
loved the last 2 lines.
and i love the advice nature that you took with this poem.
it shows the reader that you are writing this from an informed point of view which gives the reader more reason to believe in your words.
real good and aall i can say is continue insipiring!!

[Kamran Javed]

thanks

[Fallen Angel]

I like it. Short and simple. My style poem. :) lolz Shows your belief well.

[Kamran Javed]

thanks

[BryanaBear]

Great use of spiritualism, It shows that you have very opinionated views

[Kamran Javed]

Thanks

[Wolfwind]

We and our openess towards eachother is indeed the cure. While I may not be one to put a name to God, for I believe all names are just facets of the same divine light. I shall say that your words speak highly of the heavens beyond.
Personally, I believe we will keep getting brought forth in other forms upon the planet, until we get it right. =)

Nice Ink!
Aaron

[Kamran Javed]

The word GOD refers (ALLAH), who is one and great at all.

[Serenity Faith]

I agree. There is a story about a man who looked back on his life with God. Everywhere the man walked, there was a second pair of footprints, except for the hardest times in the man's life. God said, "See those footprints beside yours, those are mine. I have always walked with you." The man felt hurt and spoke back to God. "Then why is there only one pair of footprints at my most troubling times in life?" And God replied, "Those were the times I carried you." A wonderful piece. I hope it opens many hearts to have faith.

[Kamran Javed]

thanks for this comprehensive review, yes of course God is great at all and always with us.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

All is not lost and you are never alone. Call on your higher power it is your only option.

[Kamran Javed]

here The higher power is GOD (ALLAH). and Yes I agree we never alone because GOD (ALLAH) is always with us.

[Elizabeth Carter]

This is very good and very heart felt. It contains a message that I need to remember at this time in my life. Although, the word choice was a bit confusing and there were breaks in the flow that could be improved, this was still a poem that I enjoyed reading. Nice work.

[Kamran Javed]

thanks for reading and reviewing my poem.

[A Teenage Girl]

Very nice, great job! "Remember in this mortal world nothing can be stay more", nice line! I like it!

[Kamran Javed]

I agree with you.. the same message I try to convey here. thanks for reading and doing comments.