You!

You!

A Poem by Kamran Javed

Your liking to me is fake
You’re reason of my heart break
Time does not stop. and go on
I am fed up with my life, now alone
All you have done, this for me with no regretting
I know you have habit of forgetting
I am still alive by the Grace and God Blessing
Your care to me just fake and tempting

© 2013 Kamran Javed


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Awesome poem. It's so heart-rending but very strong as well, and by that I mean the words reflect a very strong and brave response to this difficult situation. Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


A lovely write...Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


nice poem!! a few errors in basic writing rules, but then, this is poetry, so you're good :) wonderfully written, i love the emotion

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kamran Javed

10 Years Ago

English is my second language.. so mistakes may happens.. it is very encouraging.
Authoress

10 Years Ago

ah.. that explains it!! well done for a second language!! or any language, really
Friendship can be tough, especially when things go awry... I only hope the pain from deceit and heartbreak will heal quickly. Nice write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kamran Javed

10 Years Ago

thanks for reviewing.
Robbie~xoxo~

10 Years Ago

my pleasure. :)
Despite the broken English, I could still clearly understanding the content of your poem. You definitely expressed have a deep and personal interpretation of the themes of love, betrayal and loneliness. The poem is short and punchy and really captures the sombre and melancholy tone. The only thing I suggest looking back on is your sentence structure. I assume English isn't your first language, and that doesn't make your poem any less awesome, but you may want to rearrange a few lines so that they better express your ideas.
Don't get me wrong, I really like your poem! Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kamran Javed

10 Years Ago

English is my second language. so mistakes may happens.
Jane P.

10 Years Ago

I completely understand and what I was trying to say was that it doesn't actually detract from your .. read more
So emotional. I like the words...sounds like what I have said long time ago.

Thanks for sharing this.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Oh the pain of finding someone that shares common interest. But if we never experienced the trials and tribulations of love what would so many of us write about? I like your phrase "I know you have a habit of forgetting." And how you use the word "fake" in the beginning and the end, as if you're peeling back the layers and presenting the real poser.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Kamran Javed

11 Years Ago

this is real experienced so I try to present it accordingly.
It does hurt to find out someone is not who we are but at least we know who we are and we can move on from those who hurt us and who don't know who they are.

Posted 11 Years Ago


It hurts when we realize the person we thought we knew, we didn't really know them at all...well done Kamran.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Kamran Javed
Kamran Javed

Karachi, Islam, Pakistan



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