Remorse

{First attempt} Something that popped into my head.

In times of dread.  

Let it never be said.

The thoughts within my head.  

I think of the dead.  

I want to be unafraid.  

Although my head is full of fear.

I shall not shed, not one tear.  

For now it is made clear.  

I'm surrounded by those held dear.  

Author's Note

I have never attempted a poem till now. I have no idea if it is good or bad, feedback is welcomed.

Reviews

[Soma-ko]

I hope you don't mind, but while reading it I corrected it in my head by giving it a better flow:

In times of dread,
Let it never be said.
What I think in my head,
The thoughts of the dead.

I want to be unafraid.

Although my mind is filled with fear,
I shall not shed, not a single tear.
For now it has been made clear,
That I'm surround, by those who are dear.

Your poem is fine. Honestly, I'm here from taking a break from reading 'Chapter one' by you, and throughout the story, I have found tiny errors here and there, but I haven't finished it yet, and I might take awhile to. The length is quite daunting for me, albeit I love reading, my eyes have been hurting more frequent the more I read. So a review may take awhile.

[M.King]

You've made the poem sound much better, thanks. Poems aren't really my thing but I thought I'd give it a shoot. :)

I know I'm not the best when it comes punctuality but I don't let that stop me. When I want to write I do so but I do tend to go on a bit with the leangh of it sometimes.

Anyway thank you for your feedback I want my readers to enjoy my writing so I'll make sure to make it less of an essay. :)

[Soma-ko]

Its good you don't let that stop you, for the content is what's most important. I personally am better with poem than short stories, but like you, I'm trying something off of my field. It's good to venture off into different sects of literature, and to take a break from the quotidian routine.