Pain in the arm

just something I came up with since i couldn't sleep and should be in bed but i cant sleep. Tell me what you think:)

Every night you keep me up with your pain,

No matter what I do; I cannot make you go away.

I wish I could formulate a plan to make you better.

Just seems like no way of appeasing you.

Some days your not so bad.

Sometimes I almost forget you are there.

But, When I think your not coming back,

You fight back with a vengeance.

I am not sure how you started.

Or even why you started,

But, my friend you must go.

I want you to be a spirit in the wind.

I want to be able to go to bed at night 

Without you rearing your ugly head.

Please leave my bed!

Never return to the thoughts in my head.

Your presents is no longer wanted. 

As I have previously said.

You this pain, this pain in my neck;

This pain in my arm.

Please Oh, Please could you manage to leave; 

Give my body peace from your wrath.

Reviews

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

I love how you can write a great poem about anything. You are quite clever.

[Sophie]

Wow, this is really good. Well done!

[Angelic Surrender]

This is a wonderful, and saddening poem. I wish people weren't always in pain. My father is also one of those who can't seem to escape it's grasp. I wish you, and everyone else like this peace from the pain. I hope you feel better. Great piece.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Very relateble write. Nicely done!

[rivers]

"Tell me what you think?" I think more than your arm is hurting...I get it as I was the pain in anothers a*s...She said, "I cannot make you happy...like a wounded bird you must find away to fly"...If the feelings that are sensed in this poem are reel, and they sound convincing, the crossroad stands before you. If not, if only an illusion, then you made this reader believe every word of it... Spooky you sound like my X...No offense intended, it just pokes an unhealed wound. So what I think is your poem got a rise out of the one in this screen...Intense writing...

[Jessica Samuelsen]

wow... you have really grown as a writer...