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just something u know...

 

Seeing the blood run down my arm

Makes me feel alive

Pain is nothing to me now

To late for that

Cut is deep

Deeper then the last one

Don’t care anymore

Don’t see anyone

Don’t hear anyone anymore

Life slipping out of me

Slowly

Painlessly Im dying

No one here around me

No one here to save me

All I see is the blood pooling around my feet

Blood pouring out of me

Dark red

Best color in the world

Last color I see

Pain is nothing

Hate is everything

Love is obsolete

Reviews

[Courtney]

yup and thats why it is and always will be addicting to me because how it makes me feel.. alive you know

[chris' girlfriend]

when you said that it makes you feel real it kinda made my happy cause i know im not that different.
i used to cut because it made me feel real to, like i just felt so dead

[Kitty]

"Love is obsolete" - I love that line. That's how I feel about it too. Beautiful poem. Such passion, such ferver. Love it and the red that comes with it :)

Once again, great job!!!

Josie

[eli mercuree rue]

wow that kinda sucks to die
from your own hands and still not recieve the salvation
that drove one to commit such an act

d****t now i feel like kicking someone


um
f**k



ok i read the other reviews and
i think it flows well
and i dont think you were trying to get anyones sympathy nor empathy
this was about the speaker's attempt at living
the cuts were the last hope they had
and those hopes were lynched
and sometimes cutting is the answer as sick as that may sound to non believers

haha

ok i like this poem

good
j
o
b

[M. Amphet Salt]

and thou shalt let the blood, your feelings flow on to the paper and create poetry. Over all was well writen personal poem. I did see some flaws, such as the structure. It needs better flow. Your telling me, "Hey I don't care anymore. I have slit my wrist and I am dying." But the structure keeps you from having my empathy. Good Job, life is worth living, so don't go slitting your wrist.

HI!! havent i read this one before at school?