Wicked Veins

Something I wrote randomly in 4 minutes.

These wicked veins were

getting too narrow

from my bitter state

enclosed in a body

that'd do nothing

but feel all wrenched

and a heart that shrouded

in blackness (in vain)from

the grudges it has built in  

I didn't want my life to revolve

around the same small circle...

so I woke up one morning when

the only pulse I believed would

make me feel alive;

was finally on my way

the only way to collapse

the lumps in these veins;

the only real breakthrough,

was choosing to forgive

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michelle Coleman]

Hi Manal. Reading your poem reminded me of my early twenties days when I was seeing a therapist. She told me that the person I hurt most with my refusal or inability to forgive was myself. I did not believe her for some time. But I have felt those effects that you speak of and I am still learning to let go and heal. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Daydreamer]

You have no idea how much this warmed my heart!
Thank YOU for stopping by and leaving such a wonderful effect ❤💫🌌🙏

[Michelle Coleman]

You are welcome 😊

[Girl With A Pen]

Wonderful! Such raw emotion and yet the poem seems controlled in such a dark and professional way. Beautiful peace!

[Daydreamer]

Such kindness 💗💗💗💗💗

[Sami Khalil]

A great message wrapped in a wonderful poetic style...:)....................

[Daydreamer]

I'm glad to hear this perception! Thank you so much Sir

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[Linda alexander]

Great write with a message, liked it a lot

[Daydreamer]

It's a huge honor to me hearing your comment!
I truly wish people forgive each other more! And above all, understand the true conceptions of forgiveness... Forgiveness doesn't mean making friends again, it only means cleansing out your heart even if you won't be with the person again.... Thanks again!

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[ReneeJ]

Well done for four minutes. This was powerful, especially the way I read it. Good Job!

[Daydreamer]

Tell me how did you read it then ;)

[ReneeJ]

with passion lol

[Daydreamer]

Hahahaahah, anything done in passion is done well 😆😆😆😆
I'll be reading your story soon 😉

[Daydreamer]

So, apparently this was the best piece of poem I've added till today. Thank you all for your open minded perception and I do appreciate the broadness and versatility in each perspective.
xoxo

[KacieLynn]

This is intoxicatingly dark and lovely... Brings you to that world us writers live in that seems so dark and slowed down. I love this piece, and creating it in four minutes means natural talent.

[Daydreamer]

I agree, it's quite dark. Aww, thank you so much :)

[Michelle Farren]

This poem was very deep. The fact that you wrote it in 4 minutes is insane! i always need a lot of time on my poems. This poem is very dark and is filled with such sadness but yet it turned into a beautiful piece

[Daydreamer]

I'm happy you have positive thoughts regarding it despite its sheer grim :*

[Michelle Farren]

I always try to find a positive thought in any piece i read no matter how dark it may appear (:

[MsJewel]

The only way to find peace is to forgive - You have a kind heart. Your poem is lovely
:) Julie

[Daydreamer]

Thaaankk youuu💖

[Ayushi]

You are a very talented poet..You have conveyed a deep thought with such an ease.
Forgiveness is a great trait.

[Daydreamer]

THIS REVIEW WILL LINGER IN MY MIND FOR LIFE! I PROMISE!

[Ayushi]

:) .... that's really sweet

[A. Amos]

This is one interesting write, and the end was essence of your deep and meaninful poetry

[Daydreamer]

Omg. Believe me, this review is highly appreciated by me.
please let me know what you think of other pieces of my writing :)

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome...sure will do

[Daydreamer]

Waiting for that :)