In a Blank Space

Just a simple excerpt.

But, how could a complete stranger evoke this hue of colour? How were I finally ready to engage into the "now"?

I stood in awe, with open arms and a smile that I could feel light up my eyes. I just gave in to life, in complete contentment.

I could feel her walk on every line of this labyrinthine maze, my brain. The only forte I walked with pride in.. And, though I believed it to be the only one I owned, I still never feared it breaking down at that moment. However, it did in a breakneck by her intrusion.

In a blank space, I sensed my thought threads that have taken me forever to shape, shake. It happened effortlessly, and felt as though they were collapsing the questions they'd seized.

In wonder, she gazed at me where I'd become absorbed; trying to read myself the answers in the mist.

Who cared? I was looking for a new way to cleanse anyway.

Author's Note

The mist of the fallen down questions...

Reviews

[Moonie]

It is so tender and yet very powerful. When the mist finally evaporates, and you see your true self...it feels exhilarating. Like wham! The questions are over. But then the mist crowds over again... it is only for a second that we see our true self. A brilliant write(as ever!!)!! Deeply philosophical. Deeply moving.
However, do you mean "labyrinthine maze"?

[Daydreamer]

Your opinion matters a lot. THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!
My favourite ferocious mate 💗💗💗💗😂😂😂😂

[Daydreamer]

Is that the adjective form of "labyrinth"?!?!? If yes, then yeah. I'd correct it!💘

[Moonie]

Ah, you're welcome, my special (and favourite) sagacious mate!!!♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥Keep giving us such beautiful poems!!....:) :):D
Yes, it is the adjective form.

[Daydreamer]

I'm truly humbled by your splendid words💗
aw.. Will amend it then 😇

[Bhumika Devkota]

This is an powerful and beautiful poem and an unique poem. Great job!

[Daydreamer]

This is a beautiful comment😁
Many thanks😇

[wordman]

sounds like a beautiful walk with ones self

[Daydreamer]

That's really a different perception,thank you for the time and read😃

[Rana]

What's amazing about this is the perspective. Most unique. This brief composition, it's blissful and brimming with positiveness. How fateful the coming of some people in our lives can be, how fortunate a change they can bring. Your description of the inside of the mind is admirable. Loved the read. It's real profound.

[Daydreamer]

Ranoosh, I can't thank you enough for these amazing words 😍😍😍
you made my daaay!😍😍😍

[Daydreamer]

Truly glad you think so!

[Rana]

:D .!

[Rana]

:D !

[Amber Lily]

This to me seems like an explanation of the thought process, which I imagine would be very difficult to put into words. Who knows how thoughts happen? It feels like they just appear. Maybe we do start with a blank slate and with all of our surroundings and experiences begin to fill in the space.
Thought provoking! :)

[Daydreamer]

Wow! You perceived it from a very different angle than I did while I was writing/reading it. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts 💖💖💖

[Zahra]

This is some beautiful piece of poetry, your words reflect a depth of thinking. Very nice, glad to see another talented muslim poet around here

[Daydreamer]

Most welcome to my profile, Zahra🌷🌷🌷
I'm glad as well :) thank you so much for the time and kind words 💖

[Sami Khalil]

"In a blank space, I sensed my thought threads that have taken me forever to shape, shake. It happened effortlessly, and felt as though they were collapsing the questions they'd seized.
In wonder, she gazed at me where I'd become absorbed; trying to read myself the answers in the mist."

You have summed it up marvelously in those lines. The gist of this short but powerful write...:).............

[Daydreamer]

Always the biggest honour to know about your opinion,artist :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)......

[KWP]

well I think the last line encapsulates the 'how were I finally ready to engage into the now' proposition.

I think that one is to be very lucky in life to encounter someone, something, some thoughts that shake up the very way you think, act and feel ....

how does that einstein quote go 'once your brain reaches a new level, it will never ever go back to it's original state' something like that ... that is what your excerpt reminds me of ...

and yes -- a good scrub, a good cleansing why not ...

great deep thinking as usual chick xx

[Daydreamer]

Thanks for the feedback, my dear 😁
but I dont understand the first line? What does it mean?😞

[KWP]

hmmm ok well the way I saw it was - finally one lets go of all wanting and desires - finally becoming equanimous - then the last lines were saying - how one tries to figure out the answers (of life perhpas) then _ ahhh WHO CARES! like - none of it matters - one must cleanse themselves completely to return to where we once came ... ahhh you know me - your writing always speaks in layers to me :)

[Daydreamer]

Ahhaahahahhaha!!!! I seeee xD Regarding that last line, I was thinking of changing its position in the excerpt to allow the readers to grasp the meaning/sentiment more easilyy... But then idk about that.... To me, I just wanted the narrator to convey that even the wisest, and most charged (speaking of minds) SOMETIMES NEED TO BREAK FREE TOO! No matter what the reason might be :)
your final words in the comment paint smiles on my page :)💗💘

[KWP]

xxxx :) xxxx

[Jennie Baron]

Great, work, Manal! I like this a lot, and I hope I was of help.

[Daydreamer]

Thank you for real, for the re-read💗
You surely were 😃