Pieces of Me

I want to give you all of me
my heart
my soul
my love
my life
my future
everything I ever was
am now
and will be;

Alas,
you'd rather
pick and choose
which parts of me
you want.

Reviews

[Crazy Cat Man]

nice poem....if this person loves you....he will want all parts of you...and not pick and choose. :)

[Anthony Ackerley]

V----- (that's a down arrow) - What they said.

I have nothing new on the positive side of things to add to what's already stated here. It's heart wrenching (in the artistic kind of way...like a good movie heart wrenching). Poingnant and powerful, everything this kind of poem should be.

Minor quirk though... not bad, and if I had something else to say about this one that hadn't been said already, I probably wouldn't pick on this, but you know me lol

I would consider changing "parts of me" at the end, to "pieces of me" just to match the title. Parts of me works...but since you did name the thing pieces of me, and that's the only place you use the phrase, it would make sense. But, like I said, now I'm just picking on you. It's another great write. And I'll have you know I am now late just because I stayed to write reviews like I promised. I expect grattitude! And chocolate....ok... just the chocolate.... meh, I'll settle for you just acknowledging my existance on a week to week basis, yeah, that would work lol

[Gary H]

Am thinking of renaming you Miss Minimalist. Although notably longer than the previous six lines I have read of yours, you still have the ability to conjure up images in a longer poem that stay with the reader - also giving plenty to think about!
I wondering what those parts are to 'pick and choose' and I bet I wouldn't pick the same....
Great again - at least I can give you a longer review!

[Mark]

I like the short, to the point way you've written this. No critique to give - it flows just the way it is.

[Uberjam]

very nice Tonya!

a poem that rather speaks a lot of truth about life and relationships.

truly, it is rare we find ourselves loved for all that we are. oftentimes, it is for what we are thought to be. or what we choose to reveal of ourselves to the world.

[Tigerlobo]

so true..so true...alas, we men are but animals...and fairly proud of it...a vicious, narcissistic cycle--whoaaaa! Say that five times, fast!! hahahaha

See, your poems did it again...sucked me right into the subject...I can't just sit back and say, "That's a well-written poem." I just talk back to the poem.

Good stuff! I really do enjoy your poetry!

[kevin walls]

good

[Jeff "jazzman"..]

This is a great piece of poetry, very powerful statement at the end....Well Done!

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Very powerful my dear.Yet again , I wish I knew which words to use infallibly .For whomever this was written , they should read this . Argument stated and won seamlessly .

[Tony]

It's too long! hehehehe I like it. Good Job. Can't tell you much more than that... I don't know squat about poetry.