Time

Finally, finished my Quatrains, in 8-count poem. Thank you again Richard for your help in fine tuning my poem...I am forever grateful.

   Time.... 

                            

B'neath calm clouds of endless time,

their paths had crossed again … oh, fate!

No changes made, their lives still chime;

love has no expiration date.

 

Click - click, ticked the bell of time….

 

His lips caressed each soft, closed lid;

air filled with longing’s deep desire.

All that which they knew life forbid ...

was wished - her heart he could acquire.

 

For her, his feelings ne’er denied …

intense, the moments they both sought.

Though, naked … boldly, they were tied;

forever bound, this was their lot.

 

Smooth fingers found a single tear;

emotions clung to bosoms bare.

In warm hands crying, without fear,

until no more sad tears they’d share.

                  ~~~

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

A very sensual poem Lisa, which shows us that after time has passed, seeing your loved one once more can be just as passionate as it was before...maybe even better now than before.... words of lust and feeling each other in a wonderful love tryst.....even though it might be taboo...
Thanks for sharing Lisa, have a wonderful New Year!
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh dear Betty,
As I am going back over my poems and reviews I see that I never responded to your excellent review which you sent a month ago!! I am so sorry...
I had a new knee on January 3 and I am still dealing with that. Everyday seems like a new challenge. I do miss writing...and of course reading and reviewing. I did post one today that I started many months ago......Golden Moments ... So I feel I am now back on the track of writing...
Hugs to you,
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

no apologies Lisa... I understand....feel well!
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Thank you,
Lisa

[lightsong]

All your poem is wonderfully written dear Lisa, I love the way You played sweetly with words and feelings in the beginning, but for me your last verse is the most special one... it touches rare places inside the heart. almost made me cry.... to feel safe and trust the arms of the beloved.... divine.

[Lisasview]

Good early morning,
From abit cold and rainy Spain.
I always appreciate your lovely ~ kind reviews.
You really understand the essence of my poem..
Thank you for reading my poems and always leaving a review.
Truly appreciated,
Lisa

[lightsong]

"abit cold and rainy Spain" same here my dear :> and You are so welcome ❤️

[JE Falcon]

Wow, every bit of "a moving poem".

[Lisasview]

You are so very nice to review two of my poems.. I am so appreciative.. Thank you,
Lisa

[JE Falcon]

If time permitted, I'd review a lot more. People need encouragement.

[Lisasview]

I agree..and these connections are great.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Awesome poetic poem! The love that's weaved in this is so beautifully done!

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much fo reading my poem and leaving a review. I am delighted that you feel my poem is beautifully done.
Lisa

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[Bee Oxford]

This sounds lovely. Reminds me of the act in Romeo and Juliet when they are waking up and having to go their separate ways. Nicely done.

[Lisasview]

Interesting analogy.. Love it
Thank you for reviewing my poem.. Sadly many do not leave reviews although 215 people have read my poem only 13 people ave reviewed it..
Lisa now in Spain.

[Bee Oxford]

Maybe leave notes when you upload directly asking people for the feedback you are looking for, that’s been helpful for me

[Lisasview]

Very good idea..Bee.. Thank you so much..

[gladys aily]

Wow, just wow. I am enjoying reading your writing, Lisa :):) there was actually a guy who courted me a few years ago, but I rejected him because I didn't like him. But after a few years have passed, we get a chance to be reconnected again through facebook.. and here we are meeting each other again and getting married soon. ^_^

[Lisasview]

Glad to hear that my poem spoke to you.. Funny because I just felt you would like it..Hope you will read more.. and I will read yours as well.

[Neville]

I'm with Coyote Lisa .. this is one hell of a beautiful, well crafted gentle, kind and above all loving tribute and dedication to past love or present lover ............. certainly ticks all the poetic boxes for me ..... Neville :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Neville,
I am looking back at my reviews to make sure I did not miss any..and sure enough I missed this one of your. Thank you so much for saying that mine ticks off all the poetic boxes... wow, now that is really saying something!!
Thank you for your review..it is greatly appreciated,
Lisa

[Neville]

no worries, my pleasure entirely .. Neville

[Lisasview]

You are a sweetheart.. Thank you for understanding..
Lisa

[alanwgraham]

Very accomplished Lisa. Your love poem is highly polished and flows so smoothly. Top class!
Regards,
Alan

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your review Alan... Such lovely things to say!
Lisa, now in Spain

[Patricia Wedel]

Love has no expiration date... we never know what fate may bring...
Very romantic with the touch of Winter's Frost. gently, Pat

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reviewing!!
I appreciate it.

[Patricia Wedel]

Thank you for being so eloquent in the Art of poetry.... along with Mozart. tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

What a lovely thing to say dearest Pat,
Lisa, cold here early this morning

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lisa... it has been a Year of tears mixed with hope in the Spirit of the People who may realize that it is the Spirit that brings a more peaceful environment. By the way, your Poem entitled "Time" is a cherished Love Poem. tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

You are so wonderful dear Pat to reread my Time love poem and to write to me again... I have been away from writing for awhile... and on Jan 3 I go in for a knee replacement...all those years of running....
Merry Merry Christmas dearest Pat...
Lisa

[John the Baptist]

I like the way this one evolved from romance to erotica. The changed was handled very well, so that we see the deep feeling between the partners. Rhyming and meter were also excellent. A very nice offering here.

[Lisasview]

It was planned John...
Just came out if me and onto the paper..
Thank you fir your review.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

I meant it was not planned John...

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

emotional read but lovely, nicely written

[Lisasview]

Thank you for reading and reviewing!!
I appreciate it..
Lisa

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

not a problem😊