Time

Finally, finished my Quatrains, in 8-count poem. Thank you again Richard for your help in fine tuning my poem...I am forever grateful.

   Time.... 

                            

B'neath calm clouds of endless time,

their paths had crossed again … oh, fate!

No changes made, their lives still chime;

love has no expiration date.

 

Click - click, ticked the bell of time….

 

His lips caressed each soft, closed lid;

air filled with longing’s deep desire.

All that which they knew life forbid ...

was wished - her heart he could acquire.

 

For her, his feelings ne’er denied …

intense, the moments they both sought.

Though, naked … boldly, they were tied;

forever bound, this was their lot.

 

Smooth fingers found a single tear;

emotions clung to bosoms bare.

In warm hands crying, without fear,

until no more sad tears they’d share.

                  ~~~

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

A very sensual poem Lisa, which shows us that after time has passed, seeing your loved one once more can be just as passionate as it was before...maybe even better now than before.... words of lust and feeling each other in a wonderful love tryst.....even though it might be taboo...
Thanks for sharing Lisa, have a wonderful New Year!
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh dear Betty,
As I am going back over my poems and reviews I see that I never responded to your excellent review which you sent a month ago!! I am so sorry...
I had a new knee on January 3 and I am still dealing with that. Everyday seems like a new challenge. I do miss writing...and of course reading and reviewing. I did post one today that I started many months ago......Golden Moments ... So I feel I am now back on the track of writing...
Hugs to you,
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

no apologies Lisa... I understand....feel well!
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Thank you,
Lisa

[Einstein Noodle]

especially like the story telling Ms. Lisa! and such a passionate romance that ends so sweetly! would we could all caress one another until we shed no more tears .. also appreciate the elevated language .. well done says i!
E.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading my poem..I am just loving getting my poems submitted..
Really appreciate your comment.. "elevated language."
Lisa

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was a sweetly romantic offering for Valentine's Day. I enjoyed reading. Bless, F.

[Lisasview]

Okay, this is really getting too weird.. This is the third review of yours where I did not respond...This was 4 months ago..I am beginning to think there was a glitch in the system.. Anyway I am thanking you now dear Fabian..
Lisa, in Spain

[Chris Shaw]

"For love has no expiration date"

Love that line Lisa because it is so truthful. I got carried along here in the sweet nothings. Beautiful poetry.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh, going back not my reviews and I see that I never said thank you.. Getting carried away is wonderful...
Lisa

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Oh, now this is beautiful poetry. The "soft closed lids" line was, unique, artistic, and creative. This poem is beautiful, romantic, and simply poetic. tyfs

[Lisasview]

Wow, thank you so very much.. I wrote this from my heart without editing it...yet.. my plan is to work on this poem..Have you read any of my others? I will look you up..
Thank you,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Beeeautiful, Lisa ⏰

Free Style poetry is among my favorite poetical forms, and you've certainly laid a firm foundation, with a creatively imaginative storyline and format, for a genuinely masterful composition. If you're willing, I'd like to work with you a bit on this one to help polish some finer points and make this beauty really shine … let me know.✍
A good number of your lines spoke gently to my heart, so I'll not highlight anything; yet, sigh with deep-felt emotion.

It's great to see your new efforts, Lisa … way to go! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

What lovely things to say Richard. Really appreciate every word.. I would so love help..but I know how very busy you are..

[Richard🖌]

Oh, I'm sure we can find a way to work you in. : )

[Richard🖌]

" Finally, finished my Free Verse poem. Thank you again Richard for your help in fine tuning it. "read more" Finally, finished my Free Verse poem. Thank you again Richard for your help in fine tuning it. "
You're certainly welcome, Lisa,
But, this is not a Free Verse poem, it is Quatrains in 8-count, with an abab, cdcd, etc; rhyme-scheme, and a beautiful one at that.
With but a few wee touches and it will be spot-on. 👍

[Richard🖌]

A few issues:
1. To keep from confusing your readers, change the poem's description from,"Finally, finished my Free Verse poem" to "Finally, finished my Quatrains in 8-count poem, because you changed from Free Verse to 8-count, abab, cdcd, etc; rhyme-scheme Quatrains.
2. Avoid italicized titles.
3. Add a space between your design and the last line.

Teacher's eyes 👀, you know … LOL!

[Lisasview]

Love, Love, Love your help Richard.. I will go over this and fix it today...Thank you zillions time!!
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Your teachers eye is so appreciated Richard..Catching things I needed to change!!
Thank you again,
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle, kind and loving words dear Lisa.
"His lips caressed her closed soft lids.
The air was filled with sweet
nothing whispers.
Love for her he could not hide."
I did like the above lines. When love find us. We cannot ever forget her. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your kind words..
This poem just flowed out of me with no editing..yet...
Lisa