Guardian of Memories

Three Rhyming Quatrains in an a~b~a~b, c~d~c~d, e~f~e~f, with a Rhyming Couplet envoi. I wrote this thinking that we are the Guardians of our memories... To share or not to share with others.

Guardian of Memories

Kaleidoscope colours crisscrossing skies;

wakeful kisses ~ dreams clung-to purest trust.

 Through heavenly clouds glowing sun surprise;

 divine thoughts still near, so full of shared lust.

Hugs became a song of deepest true love;

 still caressed by warmth, naked bodies knew ...

Grand serenades soar from angels above;

shared moments now one, forever so true.

 Time, but a guardian of memories ... 

fleeting quickly, as soft sea breezes rest.

 Sparkling, silver depths of blessed destinies …

always, recalling passion's words expressed.

  Blissful moments shared, entwined in love's arms;

 lost in memories of sweet tempting charms.

  

~.⏱.~

Author's Note

If you happen to read my words i would appreciate it if you would take the time to review. I always review what I read...

Reviews

[Soren]

What I took for a very romantic poem upon first reading I saw as something deeper an expression of existentialism and one's opening to one's own harmony and passion for nature itself. I loved the stanza
" Time, but a guardian of memories ...
fleeting quickly, as soft sea breezes rest.
Sparkling, silver depths of blessed destinies …
always, recalling passion's words expressed."
Beautiful Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Interesting... we are on the computer reviewing at the same time... I think about that... as I review and get reviews back from all over the world... and I think...What are they doing, where are they, etc.
I for one am sitting in my art room at the computer with thoughts of completing a poem I started awhile back. I know my husband Bob will be home soon from the gym and we will eat lunch, most likely the veggie soup I made this morning..
It is 1:32 and cool with clouds today...
Thank you so much for your review,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Soren]

Yes Lisa, I am sitting in a country house in Brazil but soon will be returning to Florida thinking the same about those that review my scribbles.

[Lisasview]

I have been to Brazil... Are you from there?
L

[Soren]

No but am a legal resident and have been going there for the past 50 years

[Lisasview]

Now that is very interesting...
Lisa

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Lisa... your Romantic persuasion is so charming and
sets the scene for a Rendezvous of Roses entwined among Lovers
impetuous nights of Blue Moon Tangoes. tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh my dearest Pat, how did I neglect to thank you so much for your delightful review.. My only excuse is that this has been such a crazy ~ busy month for me...
I haven't written one thing... Hope to get back into it soon.
Lisa

[Patricia Wedel]

Thanks Lisa… we know Poets have many thing to attend to every day… so we are always ready to understand. Hope your days are filled with love ❤️ and Joy. tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

Just about to have my second cup of cappuccino made by my adoring husband...then off to practice piano and work on the craft items I make for the Christmas Fairs..Busy Busy thank you so much for understanding.... Lisa

[Patricia Wedel]

I bout an upright Black Ebony Piano 🎹 on Sale (50 percent off furniture sale) recently at the Salvation Army Family Store. It is in my home now. I will practice from old sheet music and try to remember my Piano lessons from Eighth Grade in 1953 when I took lessons in a Teacher’s Hime after School. Never to old to brush up and further your Talent on the Ivories for the Holidays. 🫂 hugs, Pat

[Lisasview]

Fantastic dear Pat.. I began piano for the first time when I turned 50... not easy but I love it..too bad I did not have lessons when I was younger...ah well, as they say better late than never.
Lisa

[Red Brick Keshner]

From the get go a variedly visual and kaleidoscopic poem, Lisa! So much to take in and revel in from line to line. Being lost in mesmerising memories both as suggested by the poem and in your readers' memories. Thanks for sharing.

[Lisasview]

Oh, how I adore your insightful review. I have been a miss in responding to reviews this past month so please forgive me. I am going back over all my poems and checking to see whom I did not thank...
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh, I did I miss thanking you for your wonderful insightful review dear Ken!!
Thank you so much,
Lisa

[Ken e Bujold]

I truly admire the effort you put into your work Lisa. Sticking to a rhyme and beat pattern is a form I seldom have the patience to complete. I will at times as an exercise use the form but invariably I chafe against the restrictions and end up cheating, breaking a rhyme or fracturing the meter.

This one makes me smile, its a lovely poem. But somehow I ended up mixing the lines in my head and while I was thinking of it I ended up with image of kaleidoscope kisses, which I must admit sort of intrigues me as an image. May purloin it at some point.

Anyhow keep up the good soldiering as it were

[Lisasview]

Good morning Ken,
Somehow the Image I chose was removed and I am now looking for one I like to replace it.
I love the idea of Kaleidoscope kisses... might be good for a poem.
I have quite a few Free verse poems posted, most written when I was younger.
I am enjoying the challenge of writing in a structured form...but not an easy task ...
Thank you agin for taking theme to read my words,
Lisa, nearly 8am in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

memories described with such delicacy, peace and harmony.... in addition to much passion, unity, depth; implicit trust in one's love for another; I like the phrase: "Time, but a guardian of memories", so true. memories are shared forever in the knot of true passion and dreams.
Lovely, Lisa.
Best, B

[Lisasview]

Hi Betty, what a lovely and welcomed review of my little piece... I think that when we are very young we believe that all memories that are shared and remembered are exactly the same...but of course they are not. I see my memory clear as day when I speak to for instance to my sister about an event we shared when we were children...but, not only doesn't she see what I see but she has a different memory of that exact same time..Photos help.. little..
Lisa, working on getting through my reviews..

[W. Barrett Munn]

A nice sonnet. I like the slant rhyme in the third quatrain.

[Lisasview]

Glad to know you like my poem..thank you for reviewing it.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Actually, where are my slant rhymes.?

[W. Barrett Munn]

fleeting/breezes

[W. Barrett Munn]

depths/breaths/

[Lisasview]

Rather a confusing comment as Fleeting and breezes are not the final word on either line... so of course they do not rhyme...and, depths and breaths are on the same line and so of course are not meant to rhyme... slant or otherwise. Are you saying that within the same line I used a slant rhyme?

[W. Barrett Munn]

Yes. There is end-rhyme, which is the last of the line, and there can be other rhymes within a line. They types of rhymes, male, female, slant - many different names. But most modern poetry has abandoned male end rhyme (tin/gin) and structured pattern or rhyme schemes( ABAB) or (AABB) or any other.

This does not discount that there is great poetry written in this fashion - Wallace Stevens who won a Nobel Prize for poetry wrote some of his poems with a rhyme scheme.

My point is this: the poet and the poem determines if the poem should be set to a rhyme scheme; starting off by saying I am going to write a X, Y, Z rhyme scheme is not the optimal way to write. It has to so with where you want the reader to go emotionally and what words you want emphasized. An example?
As an example: here is a line of 4 iambs, thus iambic tetrameter.
I stand alone beside the sea.
But what word is critical to what you want to express. It can be written many ways:

I stand alone
beside the sea.
or
I stand alone beside
the sea
or
I
stand alone beside the sea.

Depends on where you want the emphasis felt. That, then, determines line structure.

I guess it is OK to start of saying to self I'm going to write a sonnet or a villanelle or some other structured poems. I've done it myself.

But what I consider my best work has all been free verse.
For What It's Worth. :-}

PS: I know that I can come across as preachy - I don't mean to be. It is up to each writer to determine satisfaction, not me.
W.

[Lisasview]

I have loads of free verse poetry... rather easy for me to write... Wondering if you have read any of mine?
I am at a point now in my writing to try and discover other more challenging forms and i have a fabulous teacher who has taken me from not knowing anything in January to where I am now. I have absolutely no education in poetry writing although I have been writing since I was 10 years old.
I appreciate your advice,
Lisa

[W. Barrett Munn]

I write for myself but I also write to try to get published so I am quite critical of my own writing and try to learn daily how to get better. I don't mean to impose my methods but only to share what I have learned and continue to learn.

[Lisasview]

It is always good to keep honing our craft.
Lisa, traveling in Northern Spain now on Holiday.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Your poetry is always such a peaceful sanctuary of words. Your words are always so authentic and full of passion and just pure love. A blissful shiny love. You seem to know each and every word that will work and expand the depth of the poetry. ‘Lost in memories of sweet tempting charms,’ a gorgeous way to end off a gorgeous poem. Thank you for sharing!

[Lisasview]

Wow, Cat...another wonderful review from you. Your words are quite inspiring.
Life got in my way and I have not written anything for a couple of weeks...
Thank you,
Lisa, busy in Spain

[Ruth Martz]

It makes me weep. Very well done.🙏💐

[Lisasview]

Hi Ruth,
I am so happy to see that you are reading and reviewing my poems. And, that this one made you weep!!
I really appreciate that you took the time!!
Lisa, getting late here in Spain

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

Whenever I need a moment's respite from this life of turmoil and utter chaos, I can always visit your pages and find something to hold as dear and true in a world filled with lies ... A most beautifully written romantic piece of Poetry ... Once again, I have visited and have not found myself disappointed ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Wow, Marvin...What an extremely lovely thing to say!! I am blown away by your very kind review.
read moreWow, Marvin...What an extremely lovely thing to say!! I am blown away by your very kind review.
Thank you so much,
Lisa, late in Spain but sun is still shining.